Black Haiku : Saturday, 4:PM

[abstract219]

Sun peeking thru clouds
reflected off a still lake...
can I just sit here?





(c)2005 dennis lee

 

[$$RICH$$]

watchin waves cascade
feelin the warmth of it's flair
reflecting moments

 

[watzinaname]

Clouds under my head
The ocean's foam beneath me
Peacefully, I sleep

 

[watzinaname]

hmmm...rich and watzin

so i guess this means this one wasnt too good...seeing how you placed your own pieces here....lol...a subtle re-write, huh?

hey, im open to critique.....

Oh my, not at all, it actually means we loved it. Check out some of the other haiku in the forum... Sometimes we just comment on them, but usually, even if we comment, we tend to keep the flows going... Sorry you misunderstood...you're wonderful!

 

[abstract219]

wheeeewww.....
thank you....i havent noticed that in other threads...
but thank you.
reminded me of those old graffiti tags i used to do....when someone would come and write over it...lol
pardon my insecurities.....
thank you.