Black Poetry : Embedded Sounds on a Page

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  1. shaneak

    shaneak Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    He wrote me a song…
    Written from deep within…
    His soul….
    He told me he loved…
    And he wish to have me to hold…

    I read his words written down on paper…
    More like music to my ears…

    It showed his undying love for me…
    It showed his fears…
    And with that…I shed tears….
    The sounds that came from these words…
    Just on this flat piece of paper….

    It was like a razor tearing into my soul….
    And at that point…all I wanted was him to hold…

    His words…written down on paper…
    Sung me a lullaby…with the background sound
    Of a wood pecker pecking on piece of wood…
    It told me of the frog who needed a princess to
    Turn him back into Robin Hood.
    His words…written down on paper…

    And I cried…for his love was there…
    And I question my love…I questioned if I care…
    About these words…written down on paper…

    Yet their letters jumped at me…
    Relaxed me…
    Reassured me…
    That he would be there….
    They sung me to sleep at night…
    When there was no one to hold…
    They kept me warm…during the winter cold…
    These words written down…on his paper.

    And in harmony…
    Each mellow tone. Shown in every verse…
    I’ve read so many times…you would have thought
    I had rehearse the lines…every single one…
    Every single time…I read…
    His words…written on paper.
     
  2. MapleXtract

    MapleXtract Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Pondering...

    This one had me thinkin' about nursery rhymes, and that Roberta Flack song "Killing Me Softly", all in one sitting. Had my mind workin' overtime. *Lovin' this* :D :D
     
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    beautiful flow!!

    Listening to the
    *rhythms of love*
     
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    feelin it

    deeply!

    Thank you

    A
     
  5. shaneak

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    Thanks!!!

    I was hoping i could take yall there...:)
     
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    Hunter Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Shaneak

    What I enjoyed most about this particular flow
    Was the "Words written down on paper"...and your ingenius use of repetition with this phrase

    It brings rhythm and meaning to your flow :)

    *paper-love*
     
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    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    SHANEAK....

    i followed your flow... & i felt it!

    this peace is simply wonderful...

    Peace&Love...
    Sunshyne~
     
  8. shaneak

    shaneak Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Interesting Thoughts

    Hunter: Your observation was so detailed...I could use someone like you to critique my poems. I'm always looking for intellectual feedback. Thank you..I'm glad you like my schema. But it really is just my style...I've been writing for so long..I really don't have one..Just go with flow of my thought...written down on paper...;)

    GASunshyne: thanks for the compliment...I'm glad you were feeling it. I've been meaning to ask you live in Georgia right...Have you ever read any of your poetry at Expressions...when they use to be over on Wesley Chapel?
     
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    DES ONE TOOK ME BACK IN MEMORIES
    AND THE WORDS I SPOKEN INTO A
    LOVE THATS WAS TO BE ...U TOOK ME THERE!
     
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    shaneak Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I sorry to hear about your love..but glad to know i can bring back the memories....I'm sure there was some good and some bad...But then again that's in everything.
     
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