Black Poetry : Moonset to Sunrise

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  1. Randee

    Randee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I laid there, heart beating
    sweat dripping as I longed.
    i held tight to the lie on his lips
    about how he didn't know what he missed
    as i wondered in agony about sunrise.
    Months passed as we laughed,
    shimmering in the sweat
    of night baseball, fireworks and unspoken dreams
    refusing to share, yet i know he felt the same as i
    you know in silence, beats skipped
    are accuentuated and the weak thoughts
    of the power of two are visible to those
    searching to be loved;
    coveting to be told that I can count on someone and things
    other than bill collectors and late child support payments
    yearning to hear, forever and a day
    and then...
    days became shorter and nights longer
    and responsibilities of the fall took priority
    to playdates at the park and nights spent
    foraging deep into sin
    how does one go from loving you silently
    to just being silent with no
    argument or banter, no fight
    no tears, just there and then gone...
    until the night that he held me in lies
    while I laid in his arms, stroking the
    hair on his back (that i never minded) and
    wondering where it/I went wrong
    and after all the disappointments
    and refusing to plan longer than today's afternoon
    I still miss you and the long summer evenings
    where we talked through moonsets and sunrises.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    O' how i can relate ...remines me of one in the days on the sandy shores
    from moonset to sunrise ...
     
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    loved the emotions conveyed in this piece...as well as the description of the love relationship when one is playing games and the other is accepting of it because she doesn't want to lose him...knowing that it's not going to last...coz she deserves more...yet holding on to the memories of how things were, while hoping that they could be THAT again. the YEARNING is present throughout this piece.

    love it when words speak to me.

    the river floweth
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This piece is so very real
    So well written
    and heartfelt
     
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