Black Poetry : A woman like that!

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by realrawism, Jan 18, 2004.

  1. realrawism

    realrawism Active Member MEMBER

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    Hot under the collar
    Steaming from the mid-section
    Cold feet won't let me move
    Let me open my nostrils just to catch her air
    Her hair is rope, I wish I could pull it to share a narrow line in her face Her stare is quick but remains in mind like a first kiss
    Her Fruit like sweetness consumes my belly full
    If I could touch her smile forever with my eyes closed I will never forget how to kiss her
    I want to be a love run-on sentence, non-stop, until our punctuations are declared by our path
    I'm afraid to mistreat her, scar her, degrade her or devalue her
    I think I will pass her by until I get my self together, so I speak and smile
    I'm not ready for a woman like that
     
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    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Realrawism.. Welcome to Destee..

    I enjoyed the read.
    Keep flowing.

    Nothing ventured nothing gained.
    At least she will hear you say..
    Can you take her out tonight!

    Dont pass up the chance.. she may never come this way again.
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow...I particularly liked this line:

    I want to be a love run-on sentence, non-stop, until our punctuations are declared by our path

    But every line was good here. Really enjoyed this, and welcome!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    whoaaaaa......
    welcome within dis was awesome scribing poet
    keep flowin
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    welcome welcome welcome :) realrawism

    :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave:
    :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave:
     
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    wow..this is so wow..:)
    very nice..
    enjoying this flow
    Peace
    Blue:heart:
     
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    true love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    YOU KNOW WHAT!!!!
    The fact that you're man enough to admit that you're not ready for someone like her, probably means that you are ready for someone like her. I adored this piece, it was so honest. I mean just honest, no fronting or anything, you just came with the real concerning this woman. It was so just so beautiful. Much love to you.
     
  8. realrawism

    realrawism Active Member MEMBER

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    Wow, Thanks you all!
     
  9. Leaky103

    Leaky103 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Welcome!! I love the part when you say you must get yourself together before you step to her. That is just on point. Loved every word, also.
     
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    Alizentang Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This ish was hot! Had my jaw droppin. Loved it. Time to go on and look you up!!! :hot:
     
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