Black Poetry : No Deposit No Return

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by 1poetsought, Oct 5, 2003.

  1. 1poetsought

    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Here comes,
    The love that you gave

    There goes,
    The love we each saved

    Bottled up...
    Just turned the page
    Our great lovemaking
    All in vain

    Square One,
    From whence it came

    Two hearts,
    Bet reneged

    His makeover
    Now the law of the land
    Her groove back
    Afield,
    Playing the game

    But...

    Refunds,
    So hearts beat again

    Then here come,
    The kids' boogeyman

    And there go
    Their Disneyland plans
    Different strokes ~
    The outcome the same
    Another hope chest-heart
    Broke...

    Dopes! :confused: :confused:


    1poetsought ~ Copyright 2003
     
  2. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i'm likin' this...tyte...
     
  3. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very smoothly done here
    ya pen is too sweet
    let da ink drop !
     
  4. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is straight up fresh, 1poet
     
  5. luvNwords

    luvNwords Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    tyte!!!
     
  6. 1poetsought

    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This has been a work in progress. Thanks, for your support!
     
  7. SwtT

    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow...i liked this one:)
     
  8. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow...the complications of relationship n' family
    captured perfectly...

    the title even more perfect...
    an unwavering truth
     
  9. triniti424

    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow...i agree wit sista angelic...it flowed so well and the title...was so fitting :)
     
  10. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i like this flow it
    was tight...
    an my sister angelic
    hit on the nose....
    tight my brother keep on
    flowin...
    No Deposit No Return
    feelin dis vibe...
     
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