Black Poetry : ~~~Slave~~~

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  1. PropheticNsyght

    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    When did I start to loose it?

    When did I start to loose my grip on
    reality.

    My mind ran circles and
    I completely lost it.
    I became slave to it.
    Yes, it shocked me, I mean
    after 400 years of slavery,
    I'm still a slave to something.

    Rain falls and
    the inner walls of my heart
    scream for some type of freedom.
    Like a tragic opera staged
    with the absence of sound.
    I live my life like a 1920's silent film;
    all dramatic expressions but no words...

    No words, just silence.
    My permed hair blows in my view.
    Can't really see,
    don't really know where to begin
    don't really know where to end.
    Snowfall and rainfall
    and I’m still the same...
    Still captive to this thing.
    How do I explain it?
    How do I put it in words?

    My grips on reality is gone.
    Call me foolish,
    Call me un-adulterated and a complete
    fool...
    Seems I've fallen prey to a
    master called Affection.

    Copyright 2004
    PropheticNsyght
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Masterful, this was. I particularly loved these lines:
    "I live my life like a 1920's silent film;
    all dramatic expressions but no words..."
    And the ending...I had no idea that's where you would end up. Great piece poet.
     
  3. MADDRAPPER

    MADDRAPPER Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was all right but let me drop a little knowledge in here

    On earth fakes double just to make trouble best take rubble
    And build defense barriers and become dense carriers cuddled
    With the word
     
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    nabraska Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This piece was a whole lot better than just alright!! It was SUPER-TIIIGHHT!! :jawdrop: :jawdrop:

    So keep doing your thing you got some good flava!!
     
  5. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    twas a wonderful piece...and the entire paragraph that starts
    "rainfalls and the innerwalls of my heart scream for freedom......to..
    ....... all dramatic expressions and no words" really masterful..
    I am still thinking about the last word Affection...
    fab..thanks for sharing it.
     
  6. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    what can I say, that I haven't said
    a thousand times over...
    you know how I view your Nsyght :look:

    Absolutely Divine...
    I think I'm slave to something too...your poetry... :look:
     
  7. PropheticNsyght

    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sage, you never fail to make me feel brighter than sunshine and you always cause me to re-evaluate myself as a poet and discover new and interesting ways to promote my work, for that I'm greatful beyond compare. Thank you from the bottom of my heart.
     
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    Spoken words of a true warrior truth shall not be silence :hot: