Black Poetry : RAGE

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Hiclass_female, May 31, 2004.

  1. Hiclass_female

    Hiclass_female Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Its coming from inside, tearing me apart
    making it seem as if I have no heart
    erupting like a volcano
    nobody knew when to come or when to go
    thought it was my little secret
    but my ex wouldn't let me keep it
    hidden away from all other aspects of my life
    always causing heartache and strife
    when all I want to do
    is be the sweet litte person you knew
    but it grew
    grew
    and grew
    until I realized what I had at stake
    is about to take
    an early break
    in which I'm not prepared to make
    wondering when will be my next outbreak
    wondering how much more you will take......
    I'm invaded by this stranger
    in danger
    of this demon called ANGER!
     
  2. SwtT

    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    boy, i can feel you soo much on this it's scary
     
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    the energy in this piece...
    leaps from the page, it's
    as if you can feel the emotion
    urging forth...the exact way
    it feels when you become angry...
    you captured this perfectly...
    this was tyte...
     
  4. Hiclass_female

    Hiclass_female Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    SwtT/Angelicsage: Thank you so much for the kind words. I am also a big fan of you both.
     
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    This was def. I was feelin' it. The feelings in it was most definitely felt. Anger, I teel ya it does get to you. Much love hiclass for thie tyte piece.
     
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    I felt the emotion in this, but I also felt that you were controlling your words as well as you have been controlling the anger. This was so well written. Find some release for it though, that won't be detrimental. I'm feeling this.
     
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    Tight drop lil sis.. love the engery of this flow! :flamet:
     
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    don't make me angry...
    you wouldn't like me when i'm angry...lol
    well felt scribe
    one love
    khasm
     
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    love the engery flow on
    Angel
     
  10. Hiclass_female

    Hiclass_female Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks all for the comments and the read!
     
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