Black Poetry : You're Late...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Chastity, Jul 17, 2004.

  1. Chastity

    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Do you see what time it is?
    You’re late!
    Hurry up and get here,
    Before I go out of my mind!
    You take the same amount of time,
    To get here,
    So what’s going on?!
    Did you take another route?
    Or are you even coming at all?
    Please let it not be that!
    I thought the route was safe because of the fact,
    That it was protected,
    By a rubber shield.
    He whispered in my ear,
    That nothing would happen,
    That he had it all under control.
    As I reminisce about how I was under him,
    All of the frantic ideas unfold.
    What if? Am I?
    Did he permeate me?
    Couldn’t be…but you’re still late.
    My clothes drenched,
    Saturated with cold sweat.
    I felt as if I got soaked in rain.
    I remove my clothes,
    And step into the shower.
    Water pouring on me,
    And me wishing it could wash away,
    This gut wrenching pain.
    But as I look down,
    I breathe a sigh of relief,
    As I watch the evidence of my unused womb,
    Go down the drain…
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    feeling ya vibe u scribe here
    releasing da motion whewww!
    the way u expressed this here was awesome
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Not a happy feeling when this is not in your plans. And what a creative way you wrote about this, the truth just snuck right on up on us. Great piece here, poet. ^5!!!
     
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    whoa, now this just sneaked up on me. very creative, very tight.
     
  5. Chastity

    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks u guys....I was just thinkin about a situation, not necessarily mine...and thought that it would make a great scribe. I see you think so too. :glasses:
     
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    VERY tight write:toast: I enjoyed the read....
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    That was quite creative on your behalf, I like the way the poem went, keep doing your thing. nice write.
     
  8. Poetic_Soul_23

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    WHOA! Deep! Very Deep! Scary! Good!
     
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    re:Late

    Intense excellent write.
     
  10. BlatinaPoet4u

    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I like that scribe!!!

    I realli enjoyed ur scribe too becuz mainly i can kinda relate to it and 2nd becuz u got skillz. Keep doin ur thing and may God Bless U with even more poems to come.
     
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