Black Poetry : your touch..

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Giovanni, Jan 29, 2002.

  1. Giovanni

    Giovanni Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    trying to kiss my image,
    project'd against your sweaty glaze,
    I fell into your skin; a reflective pool
    I tread through for balance.

    been a while since I felt your touch.
    still remember how your lips were curious hands
    learnin' my entire body.

    you were my evening shade,
    learn'd how to make my backbone skip
    like stones across a transparent body of water.

    your touch subdued me, had me on my knees
    pluckin' petals off the rose between your legs,
    i'm a moth drawn to the heat between you.

    you loved how I touch'd you there, & rearrang'd your pubic hairs;
    where it got hot enough to put a part between your lips, where sighs
    road sour on the funk of us, touchin' each other.

    we play'd naked,
    bodies makin' faces at one another
    like ridiculin' 4yr. olds.

    I was that ball of yarn,
    your ***** want'd to get caught up in.

    I'll never forget how I fell into you
    like a pool, and let you surround me.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    hummmm!!

    surrounded in da pool of memories
    da touch of everlasting to da mind
    flip da script and flow poet!:) lovin dis
     
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    - POEM - do post more of your work... ( aka... poetry )

    have a nice day everyone...:cool:
     
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    mhmmm...
    this was pungent with raw stickiness...
    LOVE IT!
    -7:spinstar:
     
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    Gio...u know i look at you like my younger brother so,

    what you doing talkin' bout sex....hahahaha..just kidding. hee hee.

    this was a nice piece...you got them skills to be coming off the top...i can only do it sometimes though...and i only freestyle outloud when no one is around me because it be so whack, that info need not be shared with others, na'mean...word..but er um...word...getting back to the topic at hand...

    yeah...the only thing i saw a little bit out of sorts with one line in this piece was when you said this:

    "my tongue was a bee pollenated by your pubic flower."

    i think that you meant
    my tongue was a bee pollenating your pubic flower.
    Or
    my tongue was a bee that pollenated your pubic flower.

    because the way you say it, you're saying that the flower is pollenating the bee but bees pollinate flowers...okay that is my criticism...get on the ball, Gio...you're slackin'...just kiddin'...i'm playin fah real. i digged this piece. imagery from you is always nice and unique. word.
     
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    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is soooooo nice!

    I rolled right along witcha as the images rolled off the dome!
    Very nicely done, Poet!

    a
     
  7. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Where ya' been boo? Out for a few days huh? Well, I definitely was fien'n for the Giovanni vibe....& this poem was just the fix that was needed brotha!!

    Very well written.....(but then again, you already know it) :)


    N2
     
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    YEAH!!!! That's how to roll with it.....Nice read.
     
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    Uhm, nice, very nice piece. :)


    Poetically Turn'd Out!
    CCBSKYN :heart:
     
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    Giovanni Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks yall..

    i wanna thank yall for the replies.. and N2urSoul... girl, you be satisfyin' my fix with your poetry for real.. I love your stuff.. if I may, I want to suggest a writer for yall to check out, her name is Ai. She's a very talent'd poet/writer. I'm currently finishing up her book "Vice" and it is real good.. her poetry grabs you from the get. I'll check out her other books as well, "Greed", "Cruelty", "Killing Floor", and "Sin". "Vice" has select'd poems from the books I just list'd as well as some of her new poems.. the book is off the hook for real.. you'll probably be able to find her in black bookstores (that's where I found her at) or just look for the name, Ai. She's amazing. I got her book for $5 (a steal) it's got a nice thickness to it.. and it's quality poetry.. yall check her out.. anyway, again.. thanks and be easy..
     
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