Black Poetry : your profile~

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by alyce, Jul 28, 2001.

  1. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    after our fierce rounds of loving
    I watched you lay silently in the half light
    your face turned away from me

    yet I could trace with my eyes
    the exquisite line of your profile
    upon my pillow

    after love, oooh, made us perfect
    by candle glow
    I felt you, warm, in me
    and moved my hand to touch your cheek

    so smooth and firm,
    your jaw, so strong
    your lips,
    poised, positioned,
    perfection
    pursed beneath your mustache...

    those lips, my delight...

    after we sealed our souls, joined
    our bodies, bound our hearts
    and became one under the
    moonlit sky

    I knew my life had just begun

    and if we never feel the heat of
    this perfect flame,
    or blend ourselves this way again

    If you should somehow cease to love me,

    I will ever hold in my memory's deepest embrace,
    the way love caressed your sleeping face
    upon my pillow...

    Alyce, 1999
     
  2. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    alyce

    nice illustration of love in the aftermath you saw the love
    man i read this and i felt like i was right there.

    DSSNY
     
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    ShadeeLadee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    go head on den

    MamaScamba!

    I learn so much from reading you. I must be this good when I grow up! ;)


    SWT
     
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    WOW! Alyce

    I agree with So'ja, it's like I placed myself as the character and my heart trembled. I remember a love so sweet. To watch someone you love sleep is beautiful. This was a very lovely piece.
    Thank you so much for sharing this.

    MadLove:heart: Coco
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    FEEDING OFF YA VIBE
    OF SWEET ESSENCE U FLOW
    WITHIN AND LET OUT
    BEAUTIFUL.....................:heart:
     
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    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Alyce....


    now this is one of those "Have Mercy!!" pieces fa sho!

    Dayum Sis!! nobody... & i do mean NObody does what
    You do... like You do it!! i'm in awe of your talent!! :)

    AlwaysLove.
    SunShyne~
     
  7. poeticdelight

    poeticdelight Member MEMBER

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    this was truly

    a magnificent piece hands down


    pd
     
  8. MsDLite

    MsDLite Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    come on now!

    let your pen so
    vividly describe
    his...profile...

    i can say no more on this!

    girl, you know...this is classic Alyce!

    more~
     
  9. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'll never be able

    to take credit for this, or any other 'piece of love' I've written, or have yet to write. The inspiration comes from another, who is outside of me ~ yet dwells within. And so, the real thanks belongs to someone else....and I do my best, with these humble offerings, to do just that!

    I'm honored you feel what I feel about the situation! :D

    a
     
  10. Hunter

    Hunter Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You know how I feel about this one A

    That "profile" was what first heightened my curiosity about the poet behind the lines

    I thought....here I am writing this dark poetry...and there she is over there....memorizing a man's profile on her pillow.

    We seemed so different back then...our pens so divergent whenever the ink would flow

    But oh...how you taught me well my sistah
    And I am forever grateful to you and your muse...

    For the anointing of friends

    *sketches*

    :heart: