Black Poetry : Your Pain Was Present

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  1. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I have to remember
    ... must remember that
    Your pain was present long before I
    became your shining star

    ...the woman inside me once
    bore dreams made from a dependable origin
    that is not the case now
    for you have torn every
    string within my dream catcher
    with cutting edge infidelity

    and you would do this

    rather than to untangle
    yourself from inside the web
    of discomforting lies

    I take notice of your

    moves

    moods

    patterns, and

    insecurities

    before you drop into
    an invisible coffin

    For I know now that this
    is not the first time you have died

    (or lied)

    Nor is it the first time I've
    tried to keep the shadows
    of our relationship
    in tact

    Yet, now you are daunted by
    the improbability of another dawn

    I have to remember
    ... must remember that
    Your pain was present long before I
    became your sun

    Now our earth exerts its final pull
    and I drop to my knees;
    sucker-punched
    by unfaithfulness' sinking grin






    (c) 2002 FINDING SO(u)LUTIONS
     
  2. epiphany

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    Wow...N2,
    this was so expertly done
    at times we have to realize
    that sometimes a person pain
    is not our own
    and maybe no matter what
    we do, we can't fix it or
    overcompensate..... including infidelity... excellent scribe as usual..
     
  3. GQ

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    Can One...

    get too much of a good thing such as N2???

    Hmm...nah, I don't think so...

    I'll just digest and take in all ya got!!! :laugh:

    :heart:
    GQ
     
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    N2 there's none like you girl!!!!! I'm feeling you flowing all the way in Chi-town...
     
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    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    eclipse of faith... whoa.
    i expect only the best when i tap N2 into your flowz..

    tyte
    j.
     
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    oooooooooo!!!

    N2~
    I hardly know what to say. This piece was brilliantly done!
     
  7. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    epiphany

    Sistah friend....you are so true in your response... and yes, I too agree that we must remember that anothers' pain isn't our own, as well as keeping in mind that one's pain may have been present long before they decided to get into a relationship with us... we all carry some sort of 'relationship scars' as luggage (some folk carry it to a fault & have a harder time of leaving their baggage where the lived last), behind.

    Thanks for the read... I am glad you enjoyed this one...

    N2
     
  8. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    GQ

    :lol: Thanks for sharin' your thoughts on what a "good thang" is!! :lol:
    Just save some room in that mental of yours to continue to digest more fervor-n-poetry from your gurl!! :)

    Thanks for the read!

    N2
     
  9. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Bishop. Bishop. Bishop.
    How about this...
    Can U meet me in Calumet City, Naperville or Bowling Brook??? :lol:

    N2
     
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    j'hiah

    Brotha you are so kind with words! I am appreciating your response to this piece... Glad you enjoyed!!

    N2 :)
     
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