Quiet Poetry Lounge : Your Morning Pulse

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Phenomenon, Jul 4, 2008.

  1. Phenomenon

    Phenomenon Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I felt your pulse this morning as you lay beside me
    I didn't recognize it's rhythm
    I listened to your heart beat as you slept beside me
    But it didn't match with mine
    Your walk is different
    It's not inspired by my existence anymore
    Your talk is different
    The passion has took another pattern
    You don't do the things you used to do
    You don't say the things you used to say
    And I miss it so much but today
    When I felt your pulse and listened to your heartbeat
    I couldn't help but think
    Something has died
    And as you lay beside me
    I continue to think to myself
    The reason why your pulse and heart feels so different
    Is because they are beating for someone else
     
  2. 4EVERLUV

    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Realizing Reality.....
    (smh)...nothing but the truth.
    Feeln' this deep.


    Much Luv
     
  3. asimplepoet

    asimplepoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    definitely can feel where you coming from. I loved the flow of this...
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Whew...you executed this painful realization with a sledge hammer. Well done.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    I know this all so well most def can relate to this one
     
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    choclatangel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you for putting my pain in words so eloquently!
     
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    sweet apple*pie Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was phenomenal! Very origininal....I have been the one whose pulse has died....it wasn't for someone else however. It was because the one beside me, destroyed it's beat... but Ima keep on keepin on....

    An eye opening flow....da truth may be hidden in the dark, but it will come out in the morning...
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    awesome as usual :bowdown:
     
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