Black Poetry : Your Father Called...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by HighEmme, Nov 15, 2002.

  1. HighEmme

    HighEmme Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Your father called yesterday
    he didn't say anything when I answered
    I said 'hello' three times
    and just when I was about to hang up
    he started to cry
    I didn't have to ask why he was crying
    because I already knew
    He cried so hard
    I could feel the lump in his throat
    and his sobs were so long and deep
    It was like I could feel his heart hurting
    through the phone
    He wanted to tell you how sorry he was
    for leaving you
    for neglecting you
    sorry for rejecting you
    for being the first man
    to make you question your self worth
    sorry for being a dead beat
    sorry for running away
    for being a coward
    He wanted to tell you
    how much he loves you
    and how he wanted
    just one more chance
    to make everything right
    But he knows that he can't
    So he just cried
     
  2. HighEmme

    HighEmme Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Desert Storm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Loved this one.... seas of emotions deeply felt in this one... i'm feeling it trully thanks for the read of poetry
     
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    Gaylee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Again great job, this one should go in every Barber Shop!
     
  5. HighEmme

    HighEmme Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Again, thank y'all so much for the feed back.
     
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    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I love the emotions here... but, maybe I'm just a sappy optimist who can't understand why he can't try to make it right...

    tight read, thank you

    alyce
     
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    DaFlavaFul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Pretty tyte flow there Poetess! keep scribin!
     
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    Twofish Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    peace...welcome to tha safehaven

    i'm feelin you here...cuz i've seen it 2...

    be blessed
    2fish
     
  9. HighEmme

    HighEmme Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Alyce - u are a sappy optimist :), it's okay though, thanx for the luv

    Flav - thank u too

    Twofish - thanx for the welcome as well as the luv, always appreciate it!
     
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