Quiet Poetry Lounge : Your eyes...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Akilah, Feb 21, 2005.

  1. Akilah

    Akilah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Your eyes so mesmerize me...
    They take me in darkly
    As a sirens call to a sea faring ship
    Beckoning me... silently... dangerously
    near the wreckage of my own undoing
    I see the temptation which lies behind them
    and I am unable to turn back...
    Promises of erotic pleasure and sensual delights
    They call to me...first sweetly...cajoling
    then slyly...wickedly...mocking...laughing
    I want to disrobe my inhibitions and dive...
    eagerly with abandon into those onyx pools
    drifting for eternity ~ unwilling to see or perhaps
    blinded to the hard glint of cruelty...glittering...
    nearly unseen at the surface
    ...foreshadowing...doom...





    ~ Akilah Feb 2005 ~
     
  2. gempis

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    Whoa! Mystique and captivating.......you've got me roped into it, girl.
     
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    Yes, this piece does draw the reader in, imagining a pair of mysterious, intriguing eyes. Well written piece poet.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    eyez of warmth this was outstanding and dearing through ya eyez i see
    happiness and love ...............tyte write
     
  5. Akilah

    Akilah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you Poets,

    Sista Gempis, Sista Watz, and Brutha Rich :luvv:

    I appreciate ya'll stopping by my piece
    It was inspired by a gorgeous young
    Al B.Sure look-a-like with a
    very intense gaze

    Much
    Love & Peace
    Akilah :spinstar:
     
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    info-moetry STAFF STAFF

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    peace,

    this definately had me captivated from beginning to end, leaving me only to wish I could see your eyes............

    peace my queen....
     
  7. Akilah

    Akilah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Much appreciation to you Poet...

    Brotha Info-moetry,

    Thank you for taking time to view
    my peice and for your kind words !

    Much
    Peace & Love
    Akilah :kiss:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    most welcome sometime we can see that secret gleam in another eyez
     
  9. kente417mojo

    kente417mojo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    [email protected], that was hot Akilah. Your eyes....your eyes. Beautiful you. :D
     
  10. Akilah

    Akilah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Awww thank ya cutie... :kiss:
    Dangerously seductive men...such as yourself
    fuel my fantasies and poetic musings :tongue:

    Much
    Love,
    Akilah
    :geek:
     
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