Black Poetry : Young Man, Young Man

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  1. Phenomenon

    Phenomenon Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Young Man, Young Man


    Young man, I know
    I know how it is
    To live in a world as such
    Where you are considered untrustworthy
    An ignorant minority, a stupid statistic
    Trapped in what’s unmapped
    But boldly realistic
    Caught in the judgmental whirls
    As the Earth twirls
    Young man, young man
    I completely understand
    That we are born into the commands
    Of stereotypical lands
    Of unholy racial fans
    Of dirty political demands…
    Obstacle sands
    Drained because of the pain
    Young man
    I know how it stains
    I know how the frustration becomes
    When all the drama-filled sedation remains
    No difference whether you’re in the sun or the rain
    They don’t see your name
    Just how your looks fit, how you being a young man
    Depicts where so many young men are today
    No such thing, not even the imagination can bring
    Back into focus, from the hypnosis
    Your definition, your identity
    Because so many wonders, blunders block the clarity
    Seeing you as what they see on T.V.
    The T.V that represents how we all have to be
    Try to say a word
    They hush you
    Try to have patience
    They rush you
    Try to have a dream
    They laugh and graph
    Your life with X and Y axis’s
    Predicting where you’ll turn up, since you’re part of the masses
    How you’ll turn out, never near any successes
    Feeding their route of you becoming the same
    Reckless, worthless, infectious, contagious
    Outcome
    And we all are suppose to be added up to that sum
    But even though some play those drums,
    Everyone does not carry the same strap
    Beat with the same sticks
    Follow the same map
    Even though some go on by an image
    Some by thinking its fate
    Some by the knowledge of hate
    What many may mentally create
    Young man you can state
    Something different, out of expectation
    So in order to vent
    Don’t be what they expect
    Don’t be what they detect
    Just be, just be
    Young man, young man
    Don’t fall when they call you
    Out of your name
    Don’t fall when your family
    Joins the unbelief of your strain
    Don’t fall when friends
    Turn and show you their back frame
    Don’t fall when you get a little weak
    Don’t fall when things get a little steep
    Don’t fall when things seem blind up ahead
    Don’t fall when the demons fly into your bed
    Don’t fall when you feel the need to cry
    Don’t fall when you learn the truth of a lie
    Don’t fall when you are finally on your way to the top
    Don’t fall if you see the wrong people knock
    Don’t fall if you accidentally let them in
    And if you fall never crawl
    Just get back up again
    Young man, young man
    I know and understand
    How it is to live
    How it is to give and get nothing back
    How it is to move forth and get off track
    Don’t be insulted that I say young man
    For what you may see by those words
    Are the surfaced meanings always heard
    But reach deeper and you’ll see and comprehend the phrase
    Young man, being the prince of life
    The slight dimness of light
    The growing of right
    In between the scenes of learning
    Planting the seeds even though the Earth is burning
    Young man, a part of the development
    Where lessons are evident, where chances are relevant
    The time where deception seeks each resident
    Not yet the President, but no longer the mayor
    Investigating the fields of answers to the questions
    Well, if I go here…, or well if I go there?
    Young man, where time is quick and never good to spare
    The time where many fall, depending on the fantasy of what’s fair
    But there’s so many long strides to go
    So many paces to run, so many paces to think
    So many things to be done, so many dreams to drink
    Young man, Young man
    I know what you’re going through
    Young man, Young man
    I know simply because
    I am a young man too
     
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    Tantrum Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Welcome to the Poetic Haven
    This was hot flow poet
    Very moving dont fall for real
    Nice realism fellow poet
    Much Love
     
  3. Phenomenon

    Phenomenon Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks man, that was very welcoming. Not alot of people has read my poetry, so this is the place to be to share pure expression. You the first comment I've encountered since I'm new on this piece. Glad you liked the poem and in return i will check out some of yo pieces.
     
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    :hi: i love the way your words just flow to me like a soothing stream of water. flow on phenomenon.
     
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    indeed this drifted smoothly
    wit an elegant spray i too say
    welcome to destee.com poetic playground
    welcome to the family of love and respect

    look to read more of you soon ! very nice flow
     
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    Phenomenon, man u clean it up in here, for realz man, this was mos def. U are filled with madd talent,yo, i mean i just want to let u know this read was dope especially heard ya when u said, "Don’t fall when the demons fly into your bed" Man, so true so true, and they will fall in ya bed to in da middle of the night, trying to wake up scared straight up out of your sleep" warfare for real, gotta put on my bullet proof vest for dat one, it be the word of the Living God. Wow, i'm going start speaking tongues up in here get Pentecostal on ya, so i'm going just bow out gracefully now, good flowz here felt it to da core, soothing my mental and all dat, ya know, good read, sincerely, D.S.
     
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    Phenomenon Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks so much man, it really lifts my spirit to hear comments and compliments like yours. Keeps those inspirational juices flowing through me, ya know. Appreciate it fully.
     
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    No, Prob, Bob! D.S.
     
  9. Ikoro

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    Whoa.

    Right up my alley at the moment. Brother, wherever you are, I pray you haven't fallen.

    Thank you for this piece that fortifies my spirit and faith in change and amelioration.

    Black youths stand up!

    One.

    - Ikoro
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ikoro, thank you for bringing this back. My goodness, this almost brought me to tears, made me think of my own young man, my son. You spoke like someone who has lived many, many years, and to read it from a young man like yourself, brought extra comfort to a young man like Ikoro. I'm quite taken by this poet.
     
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