Black Poetry : You'll Be Dead Within a Year

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  1. MsInterpret

    MsInterpret Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You'll Be Dead Within a Year
    By MsInterpret 2013

    You'll be dead within a year
    Not one will shed a tear
    You'll be cold and alone in the ground
    Dark and empty with no sound
    The maggots will eat at your flesh
    While you lie and rot in your own mess
    Death will ferry your soul to hell
    What direction you're going, you cannot tell
    An eternity of pain consumes your being
    And there is no way of fleeing
    Your immortal spirit chained to the flame
    Satan has made his claim
    You'll be dead within a year
    Not one will shed a tear
    Bound by an eternal conviction
    Of pain, suffering and affliction
    A thousand times more than you can bare
    No one can hear you when you swear
    The pendulum swings
    As death waits in the wings
    This is your just desserts
    I hope it tastes as bad as it hurts
    You'll be dead within a year
    And not one will ever shed a tear
     
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    Your poems remind me of how I used to write poetry! The same type flow, and everything. Between this and "The Lost Soul", I can definitely see the similarities, lol

    This one is so deep in despair! Not super scary, but in a manner fearful for thoughts of the images it provokes. Who can bear such a lost of hope?:eek:
     
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    MsInterpret Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yeah I have some dark writings :)
     
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    You don't say! lol "Got Gothic?"

    It's somber and morose tone, but I did enjoy it, tho.

    ....quite a serious subject.

    It made me think of the song "Tomorrow" by The Winans.
     
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    I know this is in retaliation for my "Country" comment...but maybe I do...Everyone has a dark side...I just am more open about it then other folks are...

    It's a dedicated poem....not to you however.
     
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    What are you talkin' bout?....Well, you "know" wrong. Aint no "retaliation." --- I was only responding to your comment about your "dark writings."

    I was just joking around witcha.....Yes, it is dark but a good piece.

    Now, I need to go read something happy or look at some puppies or babies or sumpn cute & cuddly to lift my mood back up. lol


    Even while I was reading it, it "felt" like it was in reference to someone when you wrote it....No, I didn't think me.... But, it does exude a personal slant to the reader.
     
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