Black Poetry : You

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by THEONE, Nov 5, 2004.

  1. THEONE

    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    At first I thought my inspiration
    was the days changing the
    Season rearranging
    Then I realized it was you!

    I thought I be happy if I was rich
    But thats only half true
    Rich with love, would be the treasure
    But rich with money means nothing
    Cause I be poor without you!

    I thought women came a dime a dozen
    So you being perfect was so imperfectious
    I figure if I played my card right
    The best would come
    and you were like the rest on them

    Taking you for granted
    Naw that wouldnt be me
    Not realizing my prize
    Eyes wide open....
    But cant see

    Unfin.
    Lj
     
  2. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ...you had me with this stanza *snaps*
    the sweet awakenings of love
    can never be denied...

    Very nice...
    Sage
     
  3. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is on time :time: indeed. A true testament of hindsight being better than foresight. :teach:
     
  4. THEONE

    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thnks Thnks for the read
    Much love to the fam
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    str8 on point this spoke up and out
    tyte THEONE
     
  6. plainrhythm

    plainrhythm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    beautifully written, i hope your inspiration has seen this... and i hope you get inspired to complete it. one love.
     
  7. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    That stanza that sage quoted had me too. Made me smile brotha, this was lovely.
     
  8. naujae

    naujae Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yea that's what i'm talking about