Black Poetry : You

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by phenomenalwoman, Jan 18, 2004.

  1. phenomenalwoman

    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You

    When I needed you
    You weren’t there
    When I longed for you
    You didn’t care
    When I touched you
    You didn’t feel
    When I loved you
    You boasted it wasn’t real
    When I helped you
    You asked me why
    When I grieved for you
    You watched me cry
    When I reached for you
    You pulled away
    When I tried to share my time with you
    You said not today
    When I laid down my pride for you
    You walked all over my back
    Went I bent over backwards for you
    You still left me to pick up the slack
    When I put down my life for you
    You watched me bleed
    When I spent money on you
    You showed your greed
    When I needed comfort
    You shunned me; no emotion was seen
    When I expressed my feelings to you
    You were distant, cold and mean
    When I told you farewell
    You screamed this is not the end
    When I told you we could not be lovers
    You told me we also could not be friends
     
  2. realrawism

    realrawism Active Member MEMBER

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    It is amazing how many of us don't know love, won't know love but are selfish about losing it. Strong and clear work, Thanks!
     
  3. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is so tight! very well expressed indeed.
     
  4. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sounds like there was no real love lost...Like the way you brought this so matter of factly...
     
  5. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    been here...

    tyte flow. felt u deeply
     
  6. cojamalik

    cojamalik Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Have you been reading my thoughts? :lol: :lol: :lol:
     
  7. phenomenalwoman

    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yeah its crazy what we allow ourselves to go through
     
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    Sweet baby_face Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WHEW!
    How sad and comforting at the same time.
    Real nice.