Black Poetry : You Take Me In...Deep

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You take me in... deep
    Deeper than I felt I should go
    Deeper into myself, than
    I thought I could flow
    Drifting
    Floating
    Cascading
    Fathoms below
    Past all that I knew
    transformed into what I now know
    I know you're part of my psyche
    when you blew my mind
    As your intrinsic hold on me,
    started to bind
    And artistic limitations
    began to unwind
    It was a first encounter
    of the infinite kind
    You Take Me In...Deep
    Deep inside my selective inner voice
    It said to dig deeper,
    for now you have no other choice
    You're now an internal excavator
    with eternal stories untold,
    and there's no letting up
    until you've struck gold.
    Not only did I locate my own hidden
    treasures... Lo and behold!
    The jewel of your Nile shone
    the brightest, so welcoming and bold
    And thus, the magical story of us
    slowly begins to unfold
    My soul cries a river of rubies,
    flowing tears of joy as I weep
    For you take me in....
    Deep
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is beautiful and magical, sister watz. I'm envious of you! Thanks for sharing your extreme gift with us.
     
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    l took you there.... deep
    proportionate
    wisdoms began to seep as sure as l was into you
    l knew the answers to my questions of you
    l made soul suggestions from a far view
    it was in your intellect
    where
    my soul knew to connect
    in
    poetic dialect and since you have long had my respect...
    here's also my love.
     
  4. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You often have your way of humbling me gempis. A poet of your stature flows with the best of them. Thank you sister.
    J'hiah
    I humbly read
    your gracious reply
    as to how you've
    been taken in, and why
    I'm awestruck to know
    my words impressed you so
    for such poetic praise you can't buy....

    Thank you poet
     
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    I have read a lot of poems but this one is exceptional. Outstanding write.
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The depth of your sonar is captivating!
     
  7. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Poetrymama, I am ever so thankful for your praise, you humble me poet.
    Thank you so much 1poetsought. Your pen has been on fire!
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ...As always poet
    your gift shines
    beyond Destee's horizon
    causing your reader
    to be pulled in deep...as well

    love the extra flow
    w/ my boy Jh...
    u guys could have kept
    that going...*applause*

    Much tyteness...
    nothing but love...
    Sage
     
  9. sahara heart

    sahara heart Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow

    wow, u done did it to me again... this here was absolutely beautiful i shed a tear of joy with u! beautiful!!!! sublime... i want to be taken in... DEEP!!! :jump:
     
  10. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you sage for letting me know that this captivated you so. Me and j'hiah could have kept the flow going...ya think so? Not sure, but it would have been interesting to say the least. Peace sis.
    Gee, I'm not sure how to reply to your response sahara heart, you've made me speechless. Thanks a million poet.
     
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