Black Poetry : You Stripped Me...

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  1. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    you stripped me
    of the only pride i'd ever had
    you stripped me
    with every lie you uttered from your breath
    you killed
    the spirit that had lived inside me for so long
    you threw the love i had for you and left it shattered upon a wall
    you cut me
    deeply leaving my weak and vulnerable soul to bleed
    you bruised
    my heart and now my door is closed to any new seeds
    you stripped me
    of the only love i'd ever had
    it was for you and only you
    that's what makes this story so sad

    you stripped me
    inscripting your actions to haunt me 'til i die
    you broke me
    leaving me to fall, breakdown, and cry
    you scarred me
    leavin' my spirit beaten, swollen, and raw
    i wish i could say
    i hate you and you're the ugliest soul i ever saw
    but as i breakdown i realize
    i still wish i had your love
    even though you stripped me, whipped me, and inscripted me
    leavin' my love to shatter and fall...
     
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    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Powerful read!!!

    :peace:
    GQ
     
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    HURT SO GOOD

    This song of blue moved me... can u sing?

    1poetsought ~
     
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    ****...
    it beez like that sometimes...
    when cats have childlike mindz
     
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    funny how we as human being operate emotionally .... sometimes unpredictable ..... tight poem
     
  6. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    awwwwwww thanks everybody...
    this poem is from my past and i just thought i'd share it...
     
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    You've touched me. If it wasnt for him I would,nt have read that.
    You've touched me!
     
  8. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks purple moons :)
    and to answer ur question poet sought...yeah i do sing alot and i write songs also...
     
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    poeticwordstris Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    soulsistah

    dang this was deep i actually feel where you are comin from in your poem. man this poem really burns. it's never good when a person takes advantage of your niceness or your love. it makes you wanna shut everyone out and never love again.
    reading this poem brings back old memories when i was too young to know what the word love really meant and i had been takin advantage of and mistaken for a fool!!!!!!!!! it hurted
     
  10. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yep u took the words right out of my mouth poetic......this is from my younger days when i thought i was in love....and i got hurt badly as you can tell....
    but now i'm happily in love and engaged.....so we all learn from our mistakes... :)
     
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