Black Poetry : You seem a million miles away

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  1. HODEE

    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You’re sitting here next to me
    Yet it seems you’re a million miles away

    The summer heat is ninety degrees
    Things so cold between me and you
    You seem a million miles away

    I could reach over and touch your hand
    This is so hard to do
    The strain of our relations
    It has me bound, and not knowing how approach
    You’re a million miles away

    Words to be spoken
    Formed in the mind
    Never leaving the lips
    Nothing spoken nothing done
    You’re a million miles away
     
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    I almost felt a cold shiver as I read this piece. The loneliest feeling is having your loved one right beside you, and still feeling as though you're sitting alone. Quite well expressed Brother Hodee.
     
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    "words to be spoken, formed in the mind......" that line says it all. That line made me remember exactly who, and exactly when. Good poem, Hodee!
     
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    When all attempts to save a relationship seem to be met with lack of trying for whatever reasons from the other party, sadness with frustration sets in, because the end may be nearing and they seem not to even care. I think I've been there.

    Hodee you are a sensitive writer and it attracts soul-deep!

    MaddSistahlyLove!
    Coco:heart:
     
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    When the mind is a million miles away, If it's a million reasons why...
    It may be time to pack up, lock up ...and continue to look up. By the time she makes it back, you should be a million miles away.
     
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    I can remember it like it was yesterday
    when He was a millions a miles away
    There was so much I wanted to say
    But I knew it was past my time to stay
    So I left quietly and went my own way

    Excellent write it took me back to own million miles away moment
     
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    Ice cold.

    Well written, fam.

    - Ikoro
     
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    ...if he only knew

    the pain I hide inside
    I know he wonders when we're alone
    space between us has opened w i d e
    if he listens closely
    the voice he doesn't hear
    is a thirst for love
    I try to communicate my basic need
    if he doesn't know me by now, he never will
    if he would notice my somber mood
    remember our passion when love was new
    he'd likely see
    what is missing...is intimacy
    but, time has pass
    the conversations are few
    we've lost touch
    with what was wonderful & true

    ...if he only knew
    the abyss of my heart
    a million miles wouldn't separate how I feel

    I'd

    tell

    the

    world


    I
    love
    him


    ...still​


    There may be many reasons why feelings are not communicated, (this flow is only one)...especially if a couple has been together for a number of years. Things become routine and the very passion that brought the couple together is lost in the everyday functions of life, kids, jobs....etc.
    No matter how difficult at times, you have to keep talking, no matter how painful or hurtful the feelings may be to each other. Being honest with each other will always be better than silence............because feelings can easily be miscontrued.


    Thoughtful flow Hodee...very nice.



    epiphany:heart:
     
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    Wow, Hodee. This was tough to read. The emotions in this just leapt from the screen. My heart ached watching this scene.


    wow.

    just wow.
     
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    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    Epiphany, YOU are sumpn else!


    Your response to Hodee's piece is MAGNIFICENT!
     
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