Black Poetry : You Rendered Me

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  1. soulful2006

    soulful2006 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    That night while we lay in that room
    You rendereed me
    Speechless
    I could not tell if it was your style
    your appeal to me
    Or just the fact that
    we should not have been doing the thing we did
    Maybe because you were married
    Or because I am so much younger
    i can not tell
    I just know you rendered me
    an essence
    that i had long yearned for
    i felt comforted
    I felt open I felt real
    And even though I can not experience this with you any more
    the one time was all I needed
    you rendered me a new song of passion
    And owe you much for that
    and even though that night you went home to your wife
    And I went on with my life
    I still have that to look back at
    because
    You rendered me so full of soul
     
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    wow... im speechless... im feelin that...
     
  3. soulful2006

    soulful2006 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you 4 the love
     
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    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yo that was ill, check out some of my work on here.

    Peace and blessings

    Mannie

    defiantson
     
  5. soulful2006

    soulful2006 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    than you for the lvoe and I'll be sure to check you out
     
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    abstract219 ...standing on the shoulders of giants MEMBER

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    wow...im impressed....such a thoughtful write...no blame, no anger..just a beautiful way of describing a awakening....

    this is one amazing write....you nailed it.
     
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    soulful2006 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you for the compliment try to be as real withit as possible
     
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