Quiet Poetry Lounge : YOU R MY *SIMILE*

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by mzpoetic8705, Jul 30, 2005.

  1. mzpoetic8705

    mzpoetic8705 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It’s like a morning in-a-half away from being day
    It’s like a tear minus a drop from crying the night away
    It’s like sleeping ‘till dawn, leaving all the dreams behind
    There is no better way to extract these similes
    And replacing them with quiet storms and midnight sightings on the mid life crisis line

    I want to listen without hearing you
    I want to be expressive about me, and I and most importantly us
    Without having to think
    I want to write down how I feel
    Without feeling
    I want you to need me like people need Jesus
    Like the plane needs the sky to fly
    Like poets need pens to write
    Like rappers need mics
    Like eyes need vision
    And body needs language
    And yours is speaking loud and clear to me

    See, what I am trying to say is
    The days spent with you are amazing
    And I want to lie in bed with you
    Speaking of forbidden fantasies
    Singing songs of different cravings sexually
    Reading poems of how you want me mentally
    And I, just can’t help myself to kiss you
    Feels kind of out of place but it isn’t
    Cause I know that you wanted to kiss me too
    But instead you pull me closer to you
    And you read me a poem entitled, “You”
    “You are you and without you how could one conquer the impossibilities that life offers us. You are my golden star amongst silver moons. You are the reason I breathe this thing called love and exhale another thing called intimacy, see without you my knees weaken and my mind can’t think’eth because you are you”

    As this wheel continues to turn my pen will continue to burn
    See, all that is visible isn’t all that is believable
    And all good-byes aren’t see you soon
    And all silver moons don’t shine
    But you, yes you
    Are my poem
    And u I cherish inevitably
    I need to hold you like a baby needs his mother
    And i want you to be the first to hate me and love me at the same time
    I want to be the first poem that stays on your mind
    So say that you will take on these duties
    And I will promise to heal every wound of desire
    I will hold you like my own
    Cause all I want to do is love you
    But nothing is easy
    And if you feel like I am coming on too strong
    I apologize
    But must I remind you that there is no such thing as coming on too strong
    Just being strong and you continue to come to me
    See, my mind has said every simile
    And expressed every hopeful memory
    All that remains is your commitment

    Cause …
    It’s like a morning in-a-half away from being day
    It’s like a tear minus a drop from crying the night away
    It’s like sleeping ‘till dawn, leaving all the dreams behind
    And I want to hear without listening
    I want to be expressive without having to think
    I want to feel without feeling
    I want you to need me like people need Jesus
    Like the plane needs the sky to fly
    Like poets need pens to write
    Like rappers need mics
    Like eyes need vision
    And body needs language
    There he cuts me off and says,

    “See, what I am trying to say is
    The days spent with you are amazing
    And I want to lie in bed with you
    Speaking of forbidden fantasies
    Singing songs of different cravings sexually
    Reading poems of how you want me mentally”

    And he, just can’t help himself to kiss me
    Feels kind of out of place but it isn’t
    Cause he knows that I want to kiss him too
    But instead, I pull him closer to me
    And I read him a poem entitled, “You”
    “You are you and without you how could one conquer the impossibilities that life offers us. You are my golden star amongst silver moons. You are the reason I breathe this thing called love and exhale another thing called intimacy, see without you my knees weaken and my mind can’t think’eth because you are my LIKE or AS…you are my simile”

    ---MzPoetic- o7●3o●o5
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    how endearing and radiant this was
    i'm smiling now .....very sweet flow
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    No words I have can express how lovely this was. This scribe was simply brimming with the beauty of love's expression. Awesome.
     
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    miss-no-love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was so good, keep on doin ya thang!!!!!!!!!!!!! :wink:
     
  5. mzpoetic8705

    mzpoetic8705 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    THANK YOU SOOOO much!!! I am glad that you all LOVE the poem just as much as I do :)...and i am so appreciative of all the love that has been given to me....so again, THANK YOU
     
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    most welcome from within sista
     
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    this is beautiful. just beautiful.
     
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    wow this is good flow on poet.