Black Poetry : You Mean, It Could Happen Again? Slave Narrative Number Two

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    And the dream continues....

    Slave Narrative Number 2

    And they drove us deep in the heart
    of the hood. They held us inside of a school.
    To think that I used to call some of these people
    my friends. I feel like such a fool.
    Some of us began to cuss and complain as the
    shackles about our feet made us trip and fall.
    All of a sudden, I heard a gunshot...
    BAM!!!!
    Oh my God! They just splattered that man's
    brain all against that wall.
    And the one with the smoking gun said, "Now, shut
    the he!l up. Don't you people have any sense at all?"
    As we sat on the bare floor, trembling, one day
    seemed to fade into the next one.
    So weak, living off of stale bread and water
    praying for the misery to be over and done.
    One morning I awoke to find a note hidden
    in my pocket, written in blood. It read:
    They're using us as guinea pigs, testing some sort
    of drug, putting it into our water and bread.
    There is a plan in motion. But it will only work if we
    stick together. Stay strong, don't lose your head.
    If we put our trust in God, as well as in each other
    there's a chance that we won't all end up dead.

    And as I allowed my poetic mind
    to take me away
    I composed a verse in my head,
    and I heard myself say....
    Can't see the forest for the trees.
    Looking at the leaves, vibrant and green
    Each individual oak,
    is all you've ever seen.
    Can't see the forest for the trees.
    You hear the string section's
    strong, piercing melody
    But cannot seem to hear
    the entire orchestral rhapsody
    Can't see the forest for the trees.
    You see your mother, and you
    claim to recognize your father too
    Now is the time to embrace the entire
    Nubian family that surrounds you
    Can't see the forest for the trees...
    Can't see the forest for the trees...
    Can't see the forest....
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh what a dream...I'm really impressed. you laid this story out quite well it's been keeing my attention, in as much as it's a dream...I can pull out a few parts that's not a dream at all but real life. This was ever so good and very creatively done...I'll be waiting for more.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Some things are easier digested in dream mode. Glad to know that this kept your attention, and that you felt it was creatively done. Thank you Queentswana.
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    LIKE THE verse WITHIN THE DREAM...
    the imagery and use of nature..
    this dream made me feel the present and the past..
    intense and fluid too...wonderful piece
     
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    Thank you...
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Deepy, coming from one who is intense as they come, I thank you wholeheartedly.
    Queentswana, you're quite welcome.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    now dis was well felt within from da sleepy hollow of ad mind
    tyte flow
     
  8. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    But no headless horseman here....Happy to know you liked this drop. Thanks for your support Rich.
     
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    most welcome indeed sistah watz............
     
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    Feeling this drop, as it sends thoughts across my mind...just like that....just like that....loving dis....


    :jumping: :jumping: :jumping:
    Just me....
    :jumping: :jumping: :jumping:
     
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