Black Poetry : YOU, ME, US

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  1. BlatinaPoet4u

    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    She looks up at the moon,
    Glances to the stars,
    Wonders if he is looking at them too.
    Like a bird’s wings,
    Her heart flutters at the thought of him:
    Her friend, her love, her everything.
    He is 3000 miles away, and lives in a different time.
    Although their hearts are bound by late night phone calls,
    Conversations filled with stories, plans, and plenty of innuendo,
    They always seem to say, “in the future…”
    And, “when we meet…” as if it will be tomorrow.
    But there is so much time in-between.
    Enough to make them crazy.
    Maybe one day, there will be a meeting.
    Maybe there will be a fondness unmatched.
    Maybe, one day, there will be an “us”.
     
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    MADDRAPPER Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    not bad I enjoyed it but let me drop this little bit

    My team strives in competition and survives friction
    With live ammunition don’t listen to jive predictions
    Our flow smoke when provoked best yall duck down
    We blaze and take so don’t raise the stake you may lose clown
    But may die rude without a supply of food very lonely
    Being hungry so this thug today is headed to subway strongly
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    the beauty of hearts feeling and cares
    make the miles less this was well done here
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    smooth lay enjoyed this flow
     
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    Nice piece. Many people can relate to this.
     
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    LURK Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i know how u feel mamita.....i gave that feelin up tho long time ago,it was too much for tah kid...ya dig..but if you got that willpower,than do you...stay true,just dont leave yaself stranded for too long..u might lose a piece of yaself that you dont want to......You Feel Me?
    well i hope u do muneca.....

    nice peice.....lovin tha flow.....

    holla at me
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The thoughts of distant lovers pining for a time when they can actually touch. I agree with gempis, many can relate and feel this vibe.
     
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    Hey love,i got ya message but i accidentally erased it without reading it...whut is ur screename so we could talk..?.i dont want you to feel as tho im s h i t t i n g on you by not replying.....hahaha,....so holla back mamita.....peacelove :dance1: