Black Poetry : you make me

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  1. rico love

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    You make me laugh when I want to cry,
    Make me live when I want to die,
    Make me smile when I want to frown,
    You turn my life upside down.
    Believe in me when no one else does
    You’re my now, my is, my was.
    When you call my name I begin to blush,
    I'm afraid people notice I need you so much.
    When I'm with you time flies by fast.
    It's like the present is the past.
    I need you more than you can believe,
    Love you more than you can conceive.
    Think about you every night and day
    And hope my life can stay this way
    I don't want it to be any other way.
     
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    rhymebad Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was nice but why not rhyme it all the way

    When you call my name I begin to blush,
    I'm afraid people notice that my blood rush
    When I'm with you time flies by fast.
    It's like the present is the past.
    I need you more than you can believe,
    Love you more than you can conceive.
    Think about you every night and day
    And hope my life can stay this way
    I don't want it to be any other way.
     
  3. rico love

    rico love Member MEMBER

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    I was trying and thank u