Black Poetry : ...You Make Me So [email protected] Mad...

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  1. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Lately there have been a few people who have really made me mad, when they try to tell me how I should feel.
    And I know its wrong to get mad at them but I can’t help myself….anyway here’s my poem….its pretty bad…but it has all my emotions in it….


    What will my next step be?
    Cuz I’m lost in insanity
    I’m wantin’ these tears to stop
    But they continually go and drop

    Sometimes I can’t think straight
    Cuz my mind seems so erased
    And I feel so empty inside
    Because no one understands my pride

    I swear if one more person tells me!
    That cancer shouldn’t be that bad to me
    I’m gonna go off in their face you see!
    And I don’t really wanna be so mean…

    But how in the HELL can you tell me?
    When you’re *** hardly knows me?
    That my pain shouldn’t hurt so bad
    And you don’t have what I have

    You’re sittin’ up in your house, so happy
    And remain painless inside, and so happy
    Then you have the AUDACITY to step to me!
    Tellin’ me that I don’t have a right to be free!

    I don’t even mean to be rude…
    And all my words may sound crude…
    But you’re *** is getting’ on my nerves
    And I can only say it through these words

    So why can’t you just pray for me?
    And not question my pain to the highest degree?
    Why can’t you just be happy I’m alive?
    Instead of wondering if I’ll survive…
     
  2. SkinDeep

    SkinDeep Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow, girl i never knew you felt like this. you hide it so well. why didn't you tell me? you know i'm your best friend. i'm here for you if you need me. Anyway this poem was so emotional, and well written.
     
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    wow sistah
    i feel you on this
    and the point
    that have surface
    many blessing to you
    so glad to see
    you back
    Peace
     
  4. POETIC RAPTURE

    POETIC RAPTURE Active Member MEMBER

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    all I can say is wow. I won't say I know what you're going through, but just keep the faith. They probably question your pain because they couldn't handle it the way you have.
     
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    double wow...I don't know what to say...Poeple try to understand sititautions where it is unfamilar
     
  6. LovelyGoldenOne

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    thanks for your comments everybody...
     
  7. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    anymore comments?
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yeah i know...
    when youre hurting the last thing you need to hear is...
    "well you should have..."
    NO
    you should SHUTUP and leave me alone lol
    I hear you LOUD and CLEAR my sista...kick they annoying bootys out the do' so u can get ya rest lol :)
     
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    i feel ur pain ang anger..
    understand trust me..
    i just pray that all go away

    i love this flow
    its speaks of truth..and if they dont
    know they should only listen as a friend should
    peace my friend
     
  10. true love

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    this was right on target...i think when anyone's going through something that others don't understand...those others are always so quick to say you should feel like this...you should be happy cause this...you do this...yeah i know where you're coming from because i've heard those 'you shoulds' a little too often in my life time. much respect for you and your piece. i will keep you in my prayers
     
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