Black Poetry : YOU LOSE ME, YOU LOSE A GOOD THING

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  1. LadyBelle

    LadyBelle Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    TRUE STORY​


    So she said if you lose me
    You lose a good thing
    And he said, you’re right
    But there are so many good things
    What could the lost of one good thing
    Be to me

    And she said, yeah somebody else
    May groove you, but nobody else
    Could ever love you like I do

    And he said, that may be true
    But the things that these young girls can do
    Make a man like me forget about love and you
    And she said if you feel that way
    Than F…. you too

    And before he could make it to the door
    He was at his usual place on the floor
    Crying baby come baby
    And baby would come
    All week until he messed things up
    By staying out all night

    Morning would break unevenly
    And she said…….
    You know if you lose me…..
    :happens::happens::happens:
     
  2. 4EVERLUV

    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    LadyBelle:
    I really like your pen.
    This was too cute.


    Much Luv
     
  3. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    so often one don't know what they lost til it's gone and they left high and dry!

    i feel ya here and know this all so well
     
  4. LadyBelle

    LadyBelle Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    4everluv, Thank you, I appreciate the luv.

    Rich,
    Indeed, sometimes loving someone can be like stray dogs......nurse them back to health, than they bite you in the Butt...thats just my two cents.
     
  5. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    it be like that

    if he has something good why would he want to blow all that on young girls who do whatever he's small minded but um she's still there?

    :qqb021:
     
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    so true when we give them the love and comfort they need , moreso then any
    they turn there backs on you !
    i alwayz put it in the betrayal list......
     
  7. jus_dat_nice

    jus_dat_nice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    the thing about these kind of realtionships is he might be hurting BUT she's the one staying there and enduring the hurt
    the only way to find relief is to leave and these women need to see that for themselves
    wonderful job poet
     
  8. LadyBelle

    LadyBelle Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you Just_dat_nice, and So'ja, for your comments, Truth be told this was about me in my younger days. I was that woman who couldn't see my self worth until I hit bottom. I would never blame this man b/c as So'ja said it best, "she was still there", I couldn't see how destructful this relationship was untill finally.....enough was enough. But it makes for one hellofa flow.
     
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    Often folks don't know a good thing til they are gone, hopefully they learn without hurting too many folks. I enjoy your writing poetess.
     
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    Ladybelle, as i've mentioned elsewhere, this is my favorite poem by you. This one i get, with my life.
     
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