Black Poetry : You filled my soul, Yet I remain Empty.

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  1. PoeticManifesta

    PoeticManifesta Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Last night,
    he put that thing on me..
    Yall know what I mean,
    Had my toes curlin,
    eyes rollin.. in the back of my head,
    Toes crunched so tight,
    mighta caused a blood clot,
    Skin was on fire like,
    a burn victim in a n alcohol bath.
    Yea.. he put that!.. thing on meeee!
    Debated, on weither I should stay the night.
    maybe in the morning he would,
    Ahem! Hit.. it right!
    Then the dark came to light,
    I could try with all my mite,
    emotions begin to fight,
    but I could not let him in,
    no not now,
    not ever again,
    Because no matter how great is the sex,
    theres never a next.
    Stuck on the third floor,
    I shall stay in your eyes,
    your future wife to be,
    your future bearer of your children,
    the one you call,
    when you need your life put back in order,
    the one you depend on..
    Your future Mrs.Perfect!
    Well the future was today,
    and all the yesterdays past.
    You promised me a future,
    I knew we could make it work,
    Family, Faith,Career,Career...
    Educatiion.. Career,
    Somewhere in between,
    we lost what was dear.
    So when I go for the door,
    and lock it with my key,
    Thinking its complete,
    knowing that it never can be,
    Because you can never be part of a we,
    without me,
    And I never apart of a we without you,
    But until we get our stuff sraight,
    And we can love,
    not hate the fact that we have neglected,
    our hearts for our careers, family,
    I failed to see,
    He was making love to my soul,
    and I still feel empty.
     
  2. Wisdom7

    Wisdom7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    That was deep! Especially that last line :great:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It's that feeling that you're about to cross the finish line in a relay race, but somehow your carrying the wrong baton. Good description of that inkling that something is just not quite right.
     
  4. Defiantson

    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sounds like you need to close that chapter of your life and start a new one. Especially if you feel empty after all that passion. Just a thought but it was a tight drop.
     
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    bigdrizzle Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A nice poem, Poetic!
     
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    re:Empty

    This is unique within its own way. I love poems from the soul.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    the depth of within felt yet empty from the outter splash
    this was deep and heavy sis
     
  8. PoeticManifesta

    PoeticManifesta Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks yall.. im kinda in as brotha AnAfrican said.... "in the doldrums" these days.. :) thanks for the :heart: and :eek: support!@
     
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    Prizefighter16 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dayummmm....the flow for this poem was fiyahhhh....i really enjoyed readin it...

    keep the flow goin sis

    peace and love

    mz.Soull aka prizefighter16 :flamet: :jump:
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    this is like bungee jumping all plunge burger and no bun

    like i always
    you have to have a head on your shoulders
    so we can hold a converse once the sex is over

    to bad the sex didn't match the after affect
     
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