Black Poetry : You changed my life forever shorty

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  1. krazelyricks

    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Found out recently that I'mma be a mother
    By a brother
    That wants to take me home to his mother
    And announce to the family that he wants me to be his significant other
    But this ain't right
    It just ain't right
    He wants to marry me and take me to another height
    But he a drug dealer and his future ain't bright
    So him by you just ain't right

    Shorty, you sittin' in my stomach all rolled up
    And I'm crying about how I f'ed up
    I know you didn't ask to be in this world so hold up
    I'm just so weak and lonely I want to fold up

    I wanted to go to school
    And learn all my most valuable tools
    But then you
    You came and that plan was through
    If I only knew
    This was going to happened I would have postponed my first time and flew
    But I didn't now I'm scared to tell my mama about you
    Oh my god, just what am I going to do :cry:

    Deep in my heart I know what I should do
    But when I told your daddy about it his temper grew
    And he hit me violently when his fist flew
    Across my head boo
    I just wish I could tell you
    All the things going threw my mind pooh
    Instead of looking at my belly at skin tryin' to figure out what I'm going to do

    Abortion is a good option
    no take that back adoption
    But I know I can't have you that's not even mentioned
    No hesitation
    I got to get rid of you and get you to a quick and safe destination
    Whether it be heaven or another family's home station

    I know I'm going to have a lot of talking behind my back
    When I start getting fat
    I can't have that
    Especially from my peeps at school, I just can't have that
    Shorty you change my life in two weeks, can you believe that?

    Cindy, Ashley, Gerri, Freddy
    Or Dre after your daddy
    I want to name you something so you will always be apart of the family
    I know yo daddy gon' smack me
    Next time he sees me and realizes you ain't in my belly
    Pray for me
    For I have sinned father and I ain't happy
    I wish I could rewind time and just be Foxi
    But I can't now a doctors hand will soon be up in my belly
    A split second procedure and you out me
    :crying:

    Shorty, I know your father wishes you well
    But I would go to hell
    Before he would ever be around you or write you mail
    He goes to college and all that but always fail
    To be honest, I should have thought about that before he was all in me but didn't aw fingernail

    Mama gon' kick me out soon if she finds out about you
    My summer is ruined and I was suppose to go on tour before you
    Now you here I can't go no where until I get rid of you
    Mama gon' look at me funny for the rest of my life just because of you
    My life is ruined if you only knew
    Shorty, you change my life forever. Yeah son, that was you.

    :crying: :crying: :crying: :crying:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    str8 tyte and reality of life came out
    of this flow the tales of sadness yet
    a joy of life flow on !!!!
     
  3. SensualReality

    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Foxi
    Girl this was beautifully written :grouphug:
    Keep it up girl..I like this poem a lot the emotions flowed foreal,so sad :cry:
     
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    What a split second decision can do to change a lifetime. Although this is a sad tale that was spun, you weaved the threads in so precisely. Keep flowing.
     
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    another amazing piece, Foxi. dang you got skillz
     
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    Foxi,
    MAAAD PROPS
    Very intense, magnetic (pulling the reader in), realism
    demonstrating command of the dynamics of the situation
    comprehensive in coverage of the subject.....
    got the reader identifying with the sistah and shorty in the write and concerned about their futures.......and well beings

    Written well.........Write on......

    Peace and Blessings
     
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    I'm with gempis...this was an amazing piece...
    so full of emotion and lessons that are too
    often learned by our youth...

    Great Read...lil, sister...Great Read
     
  8. krazelyricks

    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks family. I'm glad you enjoyed reading my own life. That's right, this is going on in my life right now. I'm so confused that I had to put my real feelings on paper. It relieved me of some of the stress but not all of it.
     
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    Foxi...words can not express what I'm feeling for you...but please take my advise...above all thoughts...GURL...DO YOU!!!!!
     
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    Do what you gotta do ma, no matter what we still:heart: you!

    p.s that piece was so tight
     
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