Black Poetry : you cant

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by PoeticManifesta, Jun 22, 2005.

  1. PoeticManifesta

    PoeticManifesta Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    you cant love me,
    you cant hold me,
    you cant see me,
    because to you i dont exist,
    not really,
    I must be fantasy,
    cause i know in reality
    you wouldnt treat me like this,
    I tried to get in your head,
    your heart,
    but I didnt make it past the bed,
    I showed you my world,
    and you shut me out of yours,
    Maybe its time for me
    to find somebody else to love,
    cause,
    you just cant.
    Because you choose,
    not to.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    as the good book say ! one's lost anothers gain
    what one can't see someone else will .....this kinda
    takes me back in tyme to a mirror i once looked through
    i feel ya on dis piece i sure can relate ...................wow !
     
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    Whether he can't or he won't it pretty much wrks out the same, and the impact of it all hurts. Many have known this feeling, and you described it so well. Flow on poet.
     
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    to poeticmanifesta

    don't worry about why he couldnt love you
    maybe it was just he was blind to the truth
    sometimes we dont see the picture as we should
    in due time he'll see the light and he'll have the understanding like he should
    by that time it will be too late
    because by then you'll find true happiness and you'll be fixing your new man a plate
    nice read
     
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    PoeticManifesta Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    that was a swwt drop as well.. thank you all.. u know how u sit back and think of them old loves.. and just have an eiphany. t/y all...
     
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    nice flow i just went through the same thing keep up the good work.
     
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    Nicw flow
    Don't think about it to hard
    Someone missed out
     
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    If you couldn't get in his head, ...
    then his only attempt was, to take you to bed. He should be a part of your past history.
    nice piece poet, your pen is mighty
     
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    i liked the rhythm and rhyme of your flow...
    he can't...but you can...hey
     
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    Can't is a dirty word, isn't it, Sister?

    Feelin' you all the way thru!
     
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