Black Poetry : you can't

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  1. thepoetsean

    thepoetsean Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    (((feel me please)))

    you can't break a man's foot
    --and then complain how he walks

    i'm left grasping that--
    i'm left grasping that regrets--
    are human and--
    so are mistakes--
    i'm left pondering life--
    and what is right...

    (ironic that i'm left with what's right...)

    left in this harsh goodnight--
    laden with awkward silence--
    saturated in doubt--

    left to be the proverbial gasoline--
    to incite the inferno that is a love--
    left to sour in a winter's cold...

    i'm here grasping that...

    you can't break a person's heart
    --and then complain how it pumps...

    you can't be mad she's
    moving on SEAN!
    be happy that someone's happy even though you--
    knew
    she was your

    "one"

    or at least the prototype--

    lately i have known no nights--
    in which my eyelids meet--
    becuase she is my sleep--

    you can't
    blame me
    for thinking i found my soul mate--
    and lost her--
    all in the same second...

    you can't...

    (to be continued...)
     
  2. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice flow...
    felt within..work it on out...
     
  3. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WOW....

    This was incredibly emotive...

    love the rhythm and the anecdotes

    I will definitely be looking for the continuation of this piece!
     
  4. LISTERSCRIBIN'

    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sweetie, i love this bittersweet melancholy piece, as i have always loved all of ur scribes. this one is no exception, dear poet.
     
  5. triniti424

    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    whoa...deeply emotive...I hope you find your peace my brotha...:grouphug:
     
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    my goodness
    much love to you
    let it pour
    Peace
     
  7. thepoetsean

    thepoetsean Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks

    for the reads and support.

    tps
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    enjoyed the irony of this piece. Can't wait to read more.
     
  9. BaduX

    BaduX Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :bowdown: so beautiful! flo on
    GOD BLESS :angel1:
     
  10. thepoetsean

    thepoetsean Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    tanx

    thank you all again for the kind words

    tps
     
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