Quiet Poetry Lounge : You Can’t … You Won’t

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  1. beautifulblkw

    beautifulblkw Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You Can’t … You Won’t


    Our first encounter was the
    Best in the world.

    Didn’t understand how he
    Wanted me to be his girl.

    Things move fast
    His kiss so sweet.

    I love the way he rubbed my feet
    We slowed down he didn’t rush me at all.

    I loved the way he
    Was so tall.

    Thought he was the man of my dreams
    As time went on I thought I would scream.

    What started out
    As sweet attention.

    Quickly ended with avenge
    You can’t you won’t…. is what I heard.

    I was so scared
    This was absurd.

    It was till this day I knew
    Had to find a way for us to be through.

    No one knew my in house pain
    That this man was really insane.

    Had to find a way
    To end my suffering.

    In my mind I was
    So much wondering.

    Made him mad as much
    As I could.

    Understanding that he
    Would.

    Put me in my place
    At the end scar my face.

    Self-Defense is not a crime.

    Go ahead hit me one more time.

    Grab that bat from behind the chair.

    At last I wasn’t scared.


    As he screamed
    On the floor.

    There I go out the door.

    Didn’t know where I went wrong.

    Loving a man
    Or nothing at all.

    So to all my Queens
    Know who he is before your life is through.

    Don’t be blinded by the sweet
    Never let him knock you off your feet.

    Pay attention
    And stand firm.


    CAN’T AND WON’T SHOULD NEVER BE HEARD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
     
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    phynxofkemet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Chills

    your poem stirs a lot of emotion. You are right that womben need not be knocked off our feet, and we need to pay attention right from the start rather than end up in a life threatening situation. Domestic abuse affects more than just the immediate family, it destroys the fabric our our community and I admire you for addressing this topic!
     
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    beautifulblkw Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oh I just realized that this is the second time i posted this piece ...........sorry

    :qqb006:
     
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    wow word up !
    behind all the sweetness was a sour note
    as it spill into what was beautiful now wrong
    so many have sing this song in weeping tone

    Stand strong sisters !
     
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    Hi beautifulblw
    This flow had beautiful starts
    with a very heavy ending.
    Your poem spoke to me.
    Showing how you have to dig deep down
    to get the courage to break away from the crazies.
    Freedom is what I feel in your flow.
    May the drip of your pens, ease the heart.
    Keep it coming sis.

    Peace
     
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    beautifulblkw Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm pleased that you enjoyed this.
    Freedom is what I felt creating this.
    this was not just about the physical side of things that hold us back but life and all of it's crazies.
    I spent most of my days telling myself can't.....and won't......i'm so past that now .....
     
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    Wow Sister. I know I read this Thread Before, and I thought I responded. SInce I see that I did not i want you to know this Flow was Powerful and True in in the Guide those words should Not EVER be heard.
    Though your eyes the one you think may not be love
    To know yourself, is to know anyone who comes before you. I am happy you found your strength sis
     
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    I responded in the other thread as well BUT I couldnt help but speak on it again. I overstand what you saying..."I can't I won't" is a phrase too often used by us women. Once we get over that we can truly be who we were created to be...BEAUTIFUL!!! But you got that down already I see...

    Thank you for the inspiration my sista!!!
     
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    Holy Batgirl!

    This is the second bat I've seen coming out and swinging this year on the forum. This message never gets old and will hopefully hit home to those who are in the same situation. It's interesting that some men are abusive and desperately trying to run the bases with women. Their greatest flaw in their game maybe be that they never look at the whole field and see that she's more than just bases but perhaps she's a diamond! Overall, I love it and I think you hit a homerun upside his head!
     
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