Black Poetry : You Belong To Me

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Koolaid_smile, Jan 19, 2004.

  1. Koolaid_smile

    Koolaid_smile Active Member MEMBER

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    Passion of the mind hinders me from reality
    Full force desire of what I want it to be
    But she still has you by the reigns
    And I am feelin' like I could never ride again
    What's up with the way that she moves?
    Talk the way she talks which you say I could never do
    Give your heart to her and leave the bed for me [/COLOR]
    It's pure passion, desire and lust that's so bliss
    Think of my name whenever y'all are about to kiss
    She is the one that controls your mind
    Like a puppet master, your heart beats faster, and I am left behind
    Hold her hand and I am dust
    Don't think of her when we touch
    Sigh, brotha, lovin' you is too much

    Chorus
    Drop to my knees, I thought I was your waterfall
    And through it all, you became her beck and call
    Heavy emotions were dealt with
    F*** all the other s***
    N**** you belong to me
    (Repeat)

    For lusty nights, you longing for me
    Harder to breathe when touching places where it should be
    Touching, caressing, feeling the softer side
    Rocking sensual motions as I push her picture aside
    The scratches on your back claiming you as mine
    It's obvious that my heart is not contained
    Instead of giving it to me sexually, you are causing emotional pain
    Chorus 2x
    .....It still needs more, but I see what I can do. The idea came from Ludacris's Splash Waterfall song. Probably add more tonight.
     
  2. triniti424

    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WeLcOmE Kool Aid!!!!!!!!

    :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave:
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    happy to have ya :D
     
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    true love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    much love to you girl! this was the bomb...and i've been here, felt this! keep it coming! and welcome, you sure did make a big entering splash! :wave:
     
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    Hello:wave: Welcome to the family
    this flow is so nice
    nice one
    flow more
    Peace
    Blue :heart:
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :wave:
    welcome to destee
    nice drop
    hope to read more
    Peace and Love
    Angel
     
  6. Koolaid_smile

    Koolaid_smile Active Member MEMBER

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    Thank you all for the welcome. I was wondering if any of you could critique it. If there is anything wrong with it, you can let me know anytime. Thanks again.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    welcome within
    this was a very nice scribe
    but the N word we do not use and is on our banned list
     
  8. Koolaid_smile

    Koolaid_smile Active Member MEMBER

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    Oh, yeah, I edited that so I wouldn't offend anybody. It appears sometimes in my poetry, but I know not to call anyone here that.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    the N word is not allowed at all
    i did take care of it for you in the near future
    do read our rules and poetic etiquette at the top
    it will help and guide you to how we live in this community
    Thanks
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