Black Poetry : Yesterday's Dance

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    There you were looking like
    you had just rolled out of bed
    Sitting on the stoop waiting for me, we'd been
    out of touch for years, I still can't believe what you said...

    "Can I take you to the prom?", you stammered
    trying to control your voice
    I stumbled, "No, but thank you," because I was so
    shocked and shy, not because you were a bad choice

    We went our separate ways in life
    Years passed, and I heard a sorrowful tale
    The boy who tried to take me to the prom
    was spending over 20 years in jail

    It seems in your youth you hung out with
    the crowd labeled as "wrong"
    Someone was shot, the story goes you didn't do it
    but took the rap for so, so long

    I heard of your release, and was of course relieved
    but saddened about all the wasted years
    What do you do with freedom that was denied, do you
    thank God, or become consumed with anger and tears?

    I hope you have some semblance of happiness, I hope
    you have the love of family and friends to get you through
    And I was thinking, if I ever were to see you again
    this time, I would have a question for you

    Remember me? I never went to that prom, it would
    have been fun had I given you a chance
    I would appreciate it, it would be an honor if you'd oblige,
    what I mean is, brother, can I have this dance?

    And we would dance, oh we'd dance to those memorable tunes
    Finger pop to "Jungle Boogie" break a sweat to "Flashlight"
    Catch our breath while slow dancing to "One in a Million You"
    and have the live version of "Reasons" on repeat for half the night

    Wouldn't it be grand if we could linger in that teenage farewell
    fast forward past the mistakes to the wisdom of now?
    I'd try to conjure up all the joy and serenity
    that a dance down memory lane can allow

    But in reality this prom would end... Hope you had
    a great time, for I really tried my best
    It took some years, but we finally had that dance
    Thank you so much for accepting my request...
     
  2. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow, this piece had/has such a tender touch to it...In some cases it's called ..."Save the last DANCE for me" I just simply loved the lay-out of this!
    *what a difference ..a DANCE makes:11900:
     
  3. LovesDestiny

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    Wow Sis Watz! I am speechless! I felt like I was there...maybe I wasn't at your stoop but possibly on my own front porch! I think we've all had one (or more) of these moments that we've looked back on and wondered....

    But you just layed this out so sweetly, so real, so masterfully! I've got goosebumps!

    Going back to read it again.....
     
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    LovesDestiny Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ....I loved these lines especially!!!!
     
  5. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you queent, this piece has been dancing in my head for a while, and I finally decided to put thoughts to paper. Yes, some dances are a whole lot more, thank you sis.
    You humble me, LovesDestiny. Some of this really happened (not the actual dance though, lol). And I appreciate you highlighting those lines you loved. Extra nice to read you twice, thank you.
     
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    WOw love the masterdul way that you crafted the storyline with such sweatness and wistfulness with a pinch of sadness and hint of wisdom. Excellent write my sister
     
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    i was into this so much, i almost *ahem* wanted to butt in......

    .... may i have this dance with you, queen???
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm glad you felt that I included all those elements asimplepoet. Thank you so much sis.
    You certainly may, Brother j'hiah. You've certainly been missed poet. Thank you for responding so.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    all i could do is close my eyez .....this was so beautifully laid out
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Happy I could take your mind there Rich, thank you much.
     
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