Black Poetry : xperiencing you in the present

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  1. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    If today were yesterday
    tomorrow would be day three
    of still xperiencing you
    in the present...feelings
    never cease...my skin still
    holds your fingertips tracing
    my name in post intercourse
    tremors...my lips
    still taste you...mango right?
    my ears still hear your dendrites and
    axons interact cause my
    "tongue game" is good...(you said
    I'd be the number one draft pick)

    my knees are saplings beneath a heavy snowfall
    ..ready to collapse...thoughts of you that
    heavy...breathing in staccato...
    dancing between the pauses
    seeing you in motion...between slightly
    parted eyelids and epidermal tears
    that nourished moans from the
    soils of silence giving life
    ...to love amplified.

    bodies haven't touched in 72
    ..but I still experience you in the present...
    nails still impale my ideas of utopia
    ...you took me there/and I never left
    the room...God must've been a woman.

    (c)2004 blakverb "off the top thinkin"
     
  2. realrawism

    realrawism Active Member MEMBER

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    My Friend, Thank you for this love, this was true & powerful. You shared the pain and remembered the prize. Loved It!
     
  3. Bluewater

    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow poet...your flow just took me there :)
    nice very nice
    Peace
    Blue:heart:
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :jawdrop: I am just speechless by the depth and amazing erotica of this flow, blakverb. good lord this is good
     
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    true love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :bowdown: :bowdown:

    This was so so so beautiful...you really expressed the pain but the joy of memories...and still loving that one person so much you can still feel them 72 hours after they are gone. much love to you.
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ok the lines

    If today were yesterday
    tomorrow would be day three
    of still xperiencing you
    in the present...

    caught me and just took
    me the rest of the way
    you go boy this was a tight drop
    love it!!!!!!!

    angel
     
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    islander Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow, I am truly amazed by your flow. You are truly inspirational
     
  8. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :bowdown: :bowdown: :bowdown:
    PROVACATIVE
    CAPTIVATING
    PASSIONATE
    ENTANGLING
    RICHLY TEXTURED w/visual
    shall I continue or is it clear
    that this piece is the
    HIGH SCORE... :bowdown:
     
  9. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow...you drew us in, out, then back in again...just wonderful.
     
  10. kente417mojo

    kente417mojo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    That is a great poem brotha. Keep on doin it.
     
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