Black Poetry : write something better

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Niyha, Mar 20, 2004.

  1. Niyha

    Niyha Member MEMBER

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    tonight...
    i wanted to write
    something better
    see, i've never
    felt challenged except by myself
    cries for help
    rhyme themselves
    and usually...
    i write something beautifully
    for you to see
    so my right brain made my wrong brain promise
    to be completely honest
    *but what can i do when words all around me
    are rakin in 10 and 20 responses?*
    is it like the slam clubs
    tryna get tens by my name?
    or am i the same
    attention starvin'
    sentence carvin'
    dame
    i been sense startin'?

    so i wanted to write somethin' better...
    somethin' fresher than ever
    but if it never
    reaches ear or sight
    then i feel like it's whatever
    if my pen leaks onto paper
    and other poets never catch on
    maybe i should just leave the cap on...
     
  2. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice drop
    flow on...
    enjoyed the read
    Peace
    Angel
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Just like the challenge that came from you, so should the most important applause. I think we all know in our hearts when we've truly emoted our soul onto paper. I know what you're saying though, it does seem like someone just raised the bar, wonder who? This was very well written, keep writing as you do.
     
  4. twision

    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sO FAR SO SWEET!!!!!
    Never let self doubt and those who fail to notice you
    stop you from doing what you do
    You're on to something
    Something good poet

    Very nice flow here ;)

    Peace and love
     
  5. SOULSTAR

    SOULSTAR Active Member MEMBER

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    Nice flow...
    Never :nono: feel as if you need to keep the cap on this sounds fresh to me...nice drop......:)

    One..xxx
     
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