Black Poetry : Wr-Eye-ting Skillz Challenge (blakverb style 1)

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  1. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Topic: Noises in the attic
    word: footsteps


    I walk through this empty house
    cleaning what remains of dysfunction
    remnants of screams and shattering
    dishes reside in the corners...
    I hate cleaning corners it's where
    the worst rest...
    cutting in between the echos of
    pain's present I hear noises in the
    attic....footsteps of the
    children that were abused...
    treading lightly yet
    sifting around the tears that
    seeped through the ceiling
    creating clouds of misery on the
    waxed floor...
    This empty house wanting it's
    mind erased and walls torn down
    to rid itself of a stench of love lost
    one night....
    ...................one night that led to'
    outlines of a mother and the kids
    in the attic that used to hide cause
    daddy lost his job....his reflection
    then his mind...........

    dysfunction that
    led to destruction.....

    may the footsteps rest
    in peace.

    (c)blakverb 2001 "off da top thinkin'
     
  2. DymePlaya2g

    DymePlaya2g Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    10 years old and home alone
    hanging close by the phone
    often checking for dial tone
    turning on lights
    making psuedo-family's presence known
    CREAK, CREAK, SHREEK, SLAM
    noises in the attic
    peek out the window
    spy on traffic
    no cars pass by
    none suspicious on the street
    HUSH, PAUSE, OH LAWD
    why do i hear footsteps
    and i'm looking at my feet
    planted firmly on the floor
    double check locks on the door
    anxiety building more and more
    STOP, DROP, WAIT, PRAY
    heavenly father keep me safe
    guided and protected
    comfort when feeling neglected
    fear calms and mind roams
    all is ended when i hear
    HEY BABY WE'RE HOME :)

    LOVE&RESPECT
    DP2G
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    TIP TOE

    IN DA DARK
    UP TO DA ATTIC
    ALL STATIC
    AND SEE THE LIGHT
    ALL GOOD VERB!.....:D
     
  4. shaneak

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    Verb and DP2G

    These were nice...

    Verb...you words were so clear so visual so descriptive...in like dhat...i could actually picture it... It reminded of this move of these people with a big house and a little girl and they kidnapped all the boys and locked them in the basement...trying to find the right son...now that was scary...but a bomb movie.

    DP2G... your words are always peace with me... nice style. I know you glad they made it home. :D This was tight though.... I haven't read you in a while though..where you been hiding at?...

    Well any hoo...I'll be waiting to be reading...more of yall scribes...
    GIVE ME SOME MORE!!!(thats BuStA :D)
     
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    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice Blak Man!!!!

    Peace
    GQ
     
  6. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Blak~

    Look at you Boo :D Do dat schyyyt maaaaan! I'm lovin' erry bit of it!

    You alwayz takin' me there & bringin' me back safely ... I love the way you free your mind & work outside of your own boundaries! Got a sista sayin' mmmm. mmmm. mmmm. -- dayyyuuum ... you're one hellofaman!


    One Luv
    Two :heart:'s
     
  7. GYPSYMAN

    GYPSYMAN Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Blak

    This drop got me thinkin bout alot of shhh Tyght work Blak...as always.

    g-man
     
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    yo Verb

    you showing your talents here man
    you too strong you too strong

    peace

    DSSNY
     
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    i ain't read dees the other day cuz i wasn't ready but today

    i enjoyed the pieces shared...
    DP2G and blakman
    DP2G displaying the fears of a latch key kid
    a fear i used to know very well...
    thank you!

    and blak, baby you went deep
    like you always do...
    thank you for sharing.

    -7:spinstar:
     
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    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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