Black Poetry : Would you allow me...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by story, Aug 1, 2002.

  1. story

    story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    7/27/00
    7:11pm

    My love
    Would you allow me to
    Make passionate love to you
    Under swaying palm trees
    In the cool night air of Miami Beach
    I would like to taste
    Your brown sugar-coated lips
    And firmly embrace
    Your million dollar golden skin
    Fixating my iii’s upon your
    Celestial composition
    While your stare writes
    Love songs only my heart can hear...
    I would like to move into
    The district of your presence
    Even if it’s only a crevice
    I would be elated,
    Your vibrant beauty
    Is absolutely mouth watering
    You’re like an exotic tropical island you know...
    And I would simply give my life
    If it meant
    Obtaining a chance to spend a night with you...
    Would you allow me, my love
    To make passionate love to you.

    (c) 2000
     
  2. ZaKiYa

    ZaKiYa Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    allow me as I caress the catacombs of your mind
    allow me as i shake the juice free
    taste me
    tempt me and love me

    as i willing let u explore me
    as i willing let u adore
    sunlight days and moonlight nights

    are all this caramel golden delight needs
    as we rock the tidal waves of ephaniny
    as we cresendo in the moonsoon of passion

    carefully embrace
    willfully taste
    shadowed personal love box of joy



    <<just a thought-- very unfinished>>
     
  3. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    hella tyght flow wit da love that can't be resist.....word dem keyz
     
  4. LISTERSCRIBIN'

    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    story...very nice, ma friend. very nice, indeed. zakiya...now that's a hot! response. i'm lovin' it, all!
     
  5. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yo i love this imagery.

    already classic. tell dat story.

    nfinite,
    jh.
     
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    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This moves in smooth arpeggios like the skillful fingers of a harpest on them strings, y'all.

    whew!

    alyce
     
  7. Reason

    Reason Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You Are...

    Exuding talent! Diggin this line hea...

    "While your stare writes
    Love songs only my heart can hear... "

    And that's to say the least! The whole poem was all dat!

    Respect
    Reas
     
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