Black Poetry : Would We, Could We Be Friends...?

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  1. MzMelanie2u2

    MzMelanie2u2 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    “Ummm…H…Hi …uhhh…my name is Zetakiyah and…
    Well I…umm…I…i love you…a lot.
    I know you and my mom are good friends,
    And I was kinda wonderin if maybe…umm, well if you could be my friend too.
    (giggling) Sometimes I think that, uhhh…that you like,…like kinda watch me and talk to me even when I don’t see you…lol…
    Especially when I want to do bad.
    But umm,….my mom told me that you wanted to be my friend too.
    Is that true?….
    Cuz I see how you like…like make my mom happy..
    Cuz she never stops telling people about you and what you can do for them.
    And its cool how shes never alone cuz you never leave her…
    Your not like my other daddy, you always show how much you love her. You always make her smile, and she cant wait till she gets off from work so she can come home and you guys talk.
    And you always give her those nice presents.
    Like that car and our house, oh and my favorite,
    A new family.
    And even though I couldn’t figure out who gave us all these things at first, I knew right away when mom yelled out..
    “hallelujah…Thank Ya Jesus”…! ! ! !
    I just knew you did it…!
    But uhhh…I just want to know if we can talk sometimes too,
    And maybe you can give me stuff too.
    And I can tell people about you too.
    And we can have quiet time too.
    And you can never leave me too.
    And…well maybe we could like…well I guess just be friends…
    So what do you say”….

    This is an 8 year old childs prayer to be closer with God...and for the record, they indeed do become friends...Would you like for him to be your friend too..?
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    The wish and dream of every child to adulthood
    befriend in him as he is to u !
    this was so sweet and touchy too , love it flow on !
     
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    hisili Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    gurl u aint hav to warn me bout this piece at all, well put 2gether, MAd respects 4 this drop.
     
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    aww, I love the uniqueness in this piece. Very touching, girl.
     
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    This was so precious! This is a piece that should be an example to us all. The Bible says ...and a child shall lead them. Beautiful piece!
     
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    This was so cute...
    and "Original"...

    Thanks for sharing
    the beauty of innocence
    with us...
     
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    Often the clearest visions are through the eyes of a child. Love the original way you brought this poet.
     
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    :wave: Haaaaaaaaaaaay Sister MzMelanie2u2 :wave:

    Sistah Sistah Sistah !!! Whew Lawd !!! oohhhh Lercy Me !!!!

    i jes' gotta be honest ... *breeve Destee* ... this peace shole had me skurrrr'd !!!

    Chile ... i'm up here read'n and thangz ... say'n ta myself ... Lawd, where is dis peace goin ??!!!

    i know da baby aint proposition'n da boyfriend / daddy / husband ... ya know ...

    i said Lawd ... where is dis goin ... Whew Lawd ... breeve Destee ... okay ... breeve'n again ...

    den as i was ask'n da Lawd where da poem was headed ... i saw it was skrate to Him !!!

    Whew Lawd !!! :bowdown: ... you got me Sister ... 'bout messed me up ...

    had adrenalin flow'n and was ready ta stab sump'n !!!! :)

    Great Work !!!

    :heart:

    Destee
     
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