Poetry Critiques : Word Flow Opinion

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by candeesweet, Jul 29, 2011.

  1. candeesweet

    candeesweet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Like I stated once before
    My Village can b traced back through the forest
    One day they came and found "my" route through the dirt & clay
    A Force informed me to act & not react with childs play
    Our feet & instruments leave certain ways
    I'm not thinking this other species will pay
    They would sure nuff throw me off course
    And
    I have all ways been taught to patiently stay focused & porous
    They will ultimently get lost & need water from our sea floor
    This now involves more then 1 species in for survival to be aquired
    Let this Village listen & meditate for the steps we should hold on to
    Never become bewildered
    We have conquered time & time again
    Chief gives a session about species that soar, slither and for what reason they do this for
    Soldiers be ready & know who u/ r as well know the species that all ways work their way to ur door
    Winningly you will be required to knowledge & counteraction first!

    Did My last sentence just not make any sense at all and throw off the whole angle of the writing!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    not at all well understood .....nice piece
    it was like drifting inside a hot ova view of an story
    love the flow
     
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    Much Gracious Thanks For Your Honest Opinion and Compliment of The Feelings U Recieved:)
     
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    true dat just keep doing what you do because i'm watching
     
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