Quiet Poetry Lounge : Wondering Aloud

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by abstract219, Jan 3, 2012.

  1. abstract219

    abstract219 ...standing on the shoulders of giants MEMBER

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    Wondering aloud,
    Will I ever be whole?
    Will the rituals quicken,
    Will my practice take hold?

    It's been many years now
    Ive searched thru my soul
    for the Alchemist's Gold-will it come
    Before Death takes its hold.

    Wondering aloud...
    As the years pass me by.
    Is the message I leave clear?
    Or scattered ramblings of my mind?

    Like dewdrops on a daisy
    I'll leave this all behind
    Only to find
    It's just a ripple thru time.
     
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    TotalView Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    My dearest Poet Brother Abstract219,

    Wonderful. There is a beautiful sadness to this piece. It's as if out of the blue the subject feels his mortality and just questions if he will be remembered.

    Yes, precious, you will and for more reasons than you can count.

    (smile)
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I like this treatment.

    We've all been there... GREAT WORK
     
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    what is your legacy?

    mental wanderings. deep reflection.

    NICE.
     
  5. abstract219

    abstract219 ...standing on the shoulders of giants MEMBER

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    Wow. I am honored. I thank you all. All of you are the inspiration. Baller, 1poet and total view, I've been reading you all and remained impressed.
     
  6. Clyde C Coger Jr

    Clyde C Coger Jr going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    In the Spirit of Sankofa,

    .......Yes sir abstract219, yvw...and you've named some of the best here, and there are more just waiting in the wings worthy of such praise.

    Peace In,
     
  7. abstract219

    abstract219 ...standing on the shoulders of giants MEMBER

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    Indeed, Brother Clyde. These are prime writers. Im just trying to tag along...LOL
    Always good to see you Brova Clyde, you remain an inspiration also.
     
  8. Clyde C Coger Jr

    Clyde C Coger Jr going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    In the Spirit of Sankofa,

    .......Thanks abstract219 and likewise...This conversation of prime writers of poetry takes me back to my one and only, now don't laugh, but here it is, lol; it was fun though:

    http://destee.com/index.php?threads/poet-of-the-week-brother-clyde-coger.53719/#post-541870

    Peace In,
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    awesomely done big ups abstract219
     
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