Black Poetry : Won Over

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  1. Nia Maishani

    Nia Maishani Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I see him staring
    yet pretend not to notice
    for my desire burns only for you
    he has a nice smile
    and his pecs are impressive
    but I can't wait to join you for lunch
    acknowledging his compliment
    I smiled very sweetly
    recalling your breath on my shoulder

    there is no contest
    you've won hands down
    I want to parade you across town
    I forgo all others
    I've seen all their colors
    but yours is the one of its kind
    my ev~e~ry wish
    your presence has granted
    a match made in Heaven this time

    unlike the others
    of unripened years
    you've led me inside your heart
    my need to be loved
    and love in return
    has finally met realization
    whenever I'm with you
    I cherish each moment
    and vow that I'll love you eternally

    the laughter we share
    draws me deeper into you
    I'm swathed in your gentleness
    I beg for your mercy
    when strokes wax tenacious
    and Earth trips ajar on its axis
    in harmony we
    perfect melodies savor
    and meet during nightfall in dreams

    before there was us
    my life had empty spaces
    now each one is filled to capacity
    with deep satisfaction
    I meld into you
    becoming the best I can be
    something about you
    cultivates my strengths
    and ameliorates my shortfalls

    Praise Jah for your Mama
    I honour your Papa
    salutations to all who have blessed you
    our bond is so strong
    we shall be one forever
    with love growing deeper through time
    my one and only
    I'm yours for the keeping
    and this is where it all begins
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    indeed and very well written
     
  3. Gaylee

    Gaylee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nia, what can I say, I am just becoming a fan. This is a beautiful piece about the gentle side of falling in love. Very nice.
     
  4. Nia Maishani

    Nia Maishani Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    $$RICH$$ and Gaylee

    I greatly appreciate your words. Glad to know you enjoyed this.
     
  5. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    it sounds like mutual love and admiration here poet
    and love ain't a bad thing either

    nice strong piece
    and depth that you can feel in your soul

    great piece

    DSS
     
  6. UbZoRbShUn

    UbZoRbShUn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i see you doing

    your thing here sis. Lovely peace and I too am diggin yo style.




    One
     
  7. LiLi

    LiLi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was an interesting way to tell the tale of two in love...

    very nice.
     
  8. Amun-Ra

    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I Like This!

    You've said what we all think so eloquently--when the special someone is in your life this is how it feels--thanks for reminding me--Amun-Ra

    :toast:
     
  9. Nia Maishani

    Nia Maishani Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Y'all have Won (Me) Over now...

    So'ja

    Zorbie

    LiLi

    Amun Ra

    I so greatly appreciate your support! Thank you, thank you, thank you. Grateful to know you dig this one.
     
  10. cocobutterskyn

    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very beautiful peace

    I'm enjoying your poetic versatility.

    Coco :heart: