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Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Spisces, May 12, 2001.

  1. Spisces

    Spisces Member MEMBER

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    … A woman's Place


    A woman's place is in the poem
    expressed in couplets rare, for
    only a poet will ever find her there.

    but it's not a poem if no one "opens
    it and turns the key … oh, she'll there"
    for some of us to see.

    All of Time was written within her
    and her body was encased in verse.
    Her wisdom and her beauty could not
    have been rehearsed.

    She's in the poem - unless the poem
    Lives -- inside -- of her, then the lyrics &
    stanzas will be her walk, you'll smell
    gardenias when she talks.

    Flowers will bust from her bosom and
    callalilies from her castle's floor, she will
    speak of roses & baby's breath and
    her veil will be the door

    She needs to be in the poem,
    Not by your side, or in the house
    for birthing the next generation,
    but spoken eloquently by mouths
    who know that she's been taken …

    Taken from … the bottle of maple syrup;
    pulled off the box of pancakes; and torn
    from the covers of Elle and videos that
    degrade her for the sheer sexual sell

    Taken off … the trophy case and the stares
    of lustful eyes, her place is forever
    book-marked by the ribbons of her thighs


    …. and it's a poem



    *Spisces*






















    ;) … A woman's Place
     
  2. Destee

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    very nice Spisces!!!

    this almost sounds like our very own "Hunter"
    i don't know if you've read any of her work
    but you may wanna do a search .... very very nice

    i want to apologize for this getting added to the forum
    in such an untimely manner ... it was somehow placed in
    a queue waiting for approval. while no peaces are done
    that way here (moderated prior to inclusion) this one and
    a couple of others were ... i was told it happened because
    you may have started to add a poll to this peace but did
    not complete the second page of the poll ... so it was placed
    in a queue ... my apologies.

    Thanks for this beautiful peace!

    :heart:

    Destee
     
  3. alyce

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    I'm so grateful

    for this awesome work, Mr. S. ..allow me to flow with just one aspect of your piece; a single thought you have inspired...

    if a woman's place is in the poem
    it's because a man wrote
    the words upon her heart

    even when the rhythm skips
    a beat along their road
    the twain shall never part

    so if a woman's heart lives
    in the poem, then
    he is by her side....

    and even in the valley
    of the shadows of death
    the POEM shall forever abide...


    Thank you. This is a classic!

    a
     
  4. Tyrone

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    ahh yeah

    my brotha. My eyes are now open to where a woman dwells; where she needs to be.

    thank you

    Ty
     
  5. Joyce

    Joyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Remarkably Beautiful

    I truly enjoyed this unique poem. The metaphors are rich and stroke ever so gently the depths of my soul. Oh how I love this poem.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was awesomely pose'd and deep i love the flava indeed
    keep expressing ya art
     
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    this is what...........i mean this is.......do you know.........get that copyrighted quick! i love this one all the way through, no single line can define how you had my mind, and just in that wrinkle of time, i felt that you knew this was sublime............this is truly,truly,truly beautiful........looking for more..........one love
     
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    Loving thoughts that are deeply etched in the mind becomes etched onto paper to live on for an eternity. Beautiful concept, lovingly executed.
     
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    Poetic Justice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    As we all come here to unleash our thoughts, so many things can happen and i think i just experienced something that has never happened to me before, i have been awed and its so many wonderful beautiful pieces here and so much talent, but i just want to say to you, i felt the emotion in my body and the tears rush to my eyes, i have to tell you this is simply BEAUTIFUL

    Thank you for sharing this with the world.
     
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