Black Poetry : woman in my attic

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  1. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    she takes liberties
    in the nooks and
    crannies
    of my house

    she makes love in dreams
    writhing among the
    cobwebs of my old
    forgotten things

    bringing back
    post card pictures
    of
    places I’ve never
    been

    telling me old stories
    of people
    I’ve never seen

    her vanity is
    deceptive…

    she admires
    herself before
    the old mirror
    brushing away at
    dusty
    thoughts
    until my vision
    of her
    is
    clearer

    sometimes,

    I deliberately
    close down
    lock up
    shutting all
    the lights
    out

    she’ll just strike
    a match,
    light a candle
    and roam
    about

    her incessant
    noises
    keep me
    from
    sleeping

    turning over
    wish boxes
    spilling
    empty
    promise-
    keeping

    she angers me
    & frightens me
    & she always
    makes me
    cry

    she’ll only hint at
    answers
    when I ask
    the question
    “why?”

    but
    she carries all my
    secrets tucked
    inside her
    underwear


    there’s a certain
    comfort knowing
    that
    she watches me
    from there


    alyce, 2001
     
  2. poeticdelight

    poeticdelight Member MEMBER

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    Spooky

    please don't let my place be haunted
     
  3. cela

    cela Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is spooky, only

    I have a suspicion about who this 'woman' is. :wink:

    Tight Ms. A.. very thought provoking

    Cela
     
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    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Alyce,

    Very well scribed!!! It's a dime piece in my book!!!

    :heart:
    GQ
     
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    mojo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hmmmmm alyce

    yous a deep sustuh!

    lovin yo flow!

    mojo
     
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    shaneak Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Interesting Thoughts

    Could that woman be your inner soul. The other side of you. Well atleast you know she's watching...taking care of and reminding of the days on the undone...She's watching but surely protecting. I like this. This was very deep in ways undescribeable.
     
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    Heartbeat Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Write the words Poet...write the words.

    BE
     
  8. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ms A....

    hmmm... thought provoking!... you know me...
    ALWAYS looking for the deeper meaning. :)

    thanks for sharing.

    AlwaysLove.
    SunShyne~
     
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    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sista A~

    Defintely a tight piece of work poetess! But then, again, I have come to expect that!!

    Much :heart: for your deep & thorough thoughts!
     
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    UbZoRbShUn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ms. A

    could that she be ye
    the other side that
    you can not hide
    it be good to have her
    out to remind you of
    things that has come
    about, long gone,giving
    yo the strength to move on to
    celebrate
    elevate
    create
    stimulte

    or something like that
     
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