Black Poetry : Without The Pillow

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Pillow talk
    without the pillow
    real thoughts cascading down
    like the branches of a weeping willow
    Crying out those utterances I've longed to say
    How I feel defies any explanation
    You've been entwined into my fabric
    the threads of which sums up our equation
    No matter how you add this up,
    this equals...we
    no matter how often we've both tallied this
    the only correct answer is us undeniably
    Let all masks and veils be gone
    honesty prevails with a bare face
    Naked as the day we were born
    The shields disappear without a trace
    I feel your chest under my head
    as I slowly seep inside your heart
    It beats with the weight of two
    for that is where the loving starts
    A pillow would only encase us
    Buffering phrases that need to be said like,
    I'm sorry
    Some things aren't as they seem to be
    My feelings remain even when words escape me
    But when I do find the words, my soul is set free
    I don't need a pillow
    to whisper what is true
    Most importantly...
    I love you...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    cascading words of da heart is felt ...got me wondering who
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Has ya wondering Rich? Well, hopefully, he knows. Thank you dear poet.
     
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    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Whenever I'm away from the site for a while you're one who I anticpate reading the most when I return!

    Not only do you have a way of feeling others, you also write things that make people feel exactly what you're trying to say. That's gifted!!!!!

    This piece drips with wonderful imagery. It's so easy to feel the intimacy and love in it.
    Another great one Watz!!!!!

    Peace and love
    twision
     
  5. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I am quite humbled by your response twision, thanks a million. It is so wonderful to see you on the forum again. :)
     
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    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    whoa

    i've seen a different side of a pillow :D:

    ... the thing is that i feel you as always..

    dunofpoetz.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yes, that different side to a pillow can be very alluring, lol. Glad to know you're feeling this j'hiah, much appreciated.
     
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    sista watz:
    All I can say is WOW!!!!!!!!
    Girl, I wanna write like you
    when I grow up.:) This was really
    lovely.

    Much Luv
     
  9. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You humble me 4Everluv. I am also a fan of your wonderful poetry. Wish I could read more of it...hint, hint. Thank you much.
     
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    Just wanted to applaud you becuase you have a way with words. I enjoyed this and look forward to reading more. :)
     
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