Black Poetry : Within

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  1. thatgirl74

    thatgirl74 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thought seem to encompass me.
    Thoughts of everything and nothing.
    Silence is the setting for this
    trip my mind is taking.
    Wandering to and fro never
    landing on any specific destination.
    Thoughts seem to control me and
    to dictate my actions and reaction
    which are none.
    Because my thoughts
    have taken over my reality
    and in my thoughts I have
    found another world an
    altered existance.
    In my thoughts I see
    things in a way no one
    could or would. In
    my mind I hear things
    no one woud understand
    It seems unreal and so
    real at the same time.
    Muddled, clouded, sharp,
    precise.
    The maze continues.
    the tumbling,falling,
    diving and ducking.
    My altered reality
    found deep
    within my quiet
    thoughts.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very sweet flowing like da way u pose'd dis
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I think it is wonderful how one can just enter there own mind and find refuge there, you captured this experience so well.
     
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    I really like the thoughts expressed in this work
     
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    Magnificent read. I was feelin' it. Flow on!!!!!!
     
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    thatgirl74 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks family for all the love and feedback.
    I sometimes just write what's bouncing around in my head.
    Glad it comes out ok
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    and from within...
    does the trueness of
    who we are...begin to arise
    if we listen carefully
    to the voice inside...

    smooth composition :spinstar:
     
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    thatgirl74 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you so much. I love feedback like this it is an inspiration
     
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    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    DEEP, that's all i can say............................. :court:
     
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