Black Poetry : Within A Corridor

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  1. shaneak

    shaneak Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Let me take you down a Corridor….
    Open your different walls…
    Discover the passion that you hold deep within…
    Will you let me in?

    To your desires…
    That I so persistently try to consume…
    Yet you refuse…
    To spoil me…
    Let me indulge in thee…

    And we get to the end of the hall…
    And their stands a great water fall…
    With A deep Valley filled with Dandelions…
    As I raise my eyes to see the Mountain Lions...
    Pacing the rocks and hills of this Great Mountain…
    I Swoop down low and then go High….
    Reaching for an answer to all of my whys…
    Questions that are yet to be answered…
    But instead being tampered with…
    And not clearly stated…
    And then the picture faded…
    As I waited on you to bring me down into the Valley…
    So I can run through that field of Dandelions…
    With you by my side…
    But instead I hide… afraid I would be eaten…
    Cause the lions haven’t been feeding…
    And you said you were leaving…
    I guess looks can be deceiving…
    And you were so believing….
    I guess I’ll turn around and wall back down the hall….
    And then I looked back still seeing the distant waterfall…
    Knowing that it was on your heart I called…
    Yet you refused to let down those walls…
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    WOAH!

    MY WALLS JUST CRUMBLED
    I SURELY WANT MUMBLE
    I SIT ON THE OTHER SIDE
    OF DA WATERFALL SO HUMBLE
    AS U WALK BEYOND MY EYEZ
    I SAW THE GLOW
    I TRYED TO ANSWER YET WORDS
    BE SILENT.......SLOWLY GENTLY
    I (((((WAVE ))))))) IN MOTION
    KNOWING I SHOULD HAVE AND DID'NT

    THANK U I LOVE THIS VENTURE...........$
    :kiss: :heart: :kiss:
     
  3. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    don't look for me...

    ...at the end of the corridor
    look to your RIGHT
    i will be there
    walking alone the corridors of life
    ...sharing the wrongs and rights
    of your EVERYDAY
    i pray
    that happiness
    and much joy
    shine their smiles upon you
    coz you have become that
    QUEEN AMONG QUEENS
    that you've always been

    but didn't know.

    NOW, YOU KNOW.

    One.
     
  4. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    **** SHA

    yo that was deep
    i like how you hooked that

    if somebody ain't on your team you got to cut they ***


    <DSSNY>
     
  5. Hunter

    Hunter Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Whoa....this corridor leads to deep passages!!

    Nicely scribed poet

    *dandelions*
     
  6. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice piece shaneak, gone on wit yo' bad self

    blak
     
  7. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sha-Sha....


    i'm diggin' it sis... yesssss... indeed!

    this was a super-nice flow... keep on
    doin' your thang!... :)

    OneLuv.
    SunShyne~
     
  8. shaneak

    shaneak Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I bow

    to all my Poeteers!!! :p

    Rich: You are quite welcome...I'm glad you enjoyed the read...Cause I haven't a clue why i wrote...Thoughts/Mind can be deadly...

    Baller: That is so sweet. I am now a Queen. :D
    And on my thrown i shall wave my wand
    ....as you stand before me
    and I shall shower thee with words of poetry
    As i reign down on the house of Destee
    with my Poeteers right beside me... ;)

    Soja: I don't know where it came from...I just started typing and thinking and it just started flowing... :lol: I'm glad you liked it though... Your thoughts are always appreciated....

    Hunter: thank you sista gurl...you ain't too bad yourself...Cause them liquid flows being hitting!!!!:toast: from one poet to another....

    Blak: Thanks...you are dha bomb...must i repeat..you are dha bomb. And you come to me wit props..dog...man. I got nothing but luv for ya!!!

    GA: Ga Gurl!!! What's up wit ya!!! I'm glad you liked the flow... I'm going to try and keep with all my great Poeteers. I can't mess wit you though...you lovely scribes just surround you wit love. I'm gonna do my thang...you keep on handling yours cause when i get the chance...I'll be looking for a read...
     
  9. GQ

    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I feel ya too Shaneak!!!

    Good job on this here!!!

    :heart:
    GQ
     
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