Black Poetry : " With or w/outHer space - pt. 2 "

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  1. Hypnotize

    Hypnotize Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ( not as long, but long - it's important )


    " With or w/outHer space - pt. 2 ... timing is everything"


    Like something straight outta Jason's Lyric,
    we arrived at a secluded place.
    The spot was hidden so our picnic
    becomes expedition.
    She's IndianaCleopatra Jones,
    and I'm keepin up w/ this jones that makes grown men cry.

    I've seen her in every outfit.
    Delicate sundress sandal sunday afternoon ponytail
    holygrail, holey jean free T- shirt
    sign on the dotted line.
    Now her mickey mouse socks become hiking boots,
    she's leading the way.

    Her tiny hand leading me over jagged rocks
    and timber fallen mighty oak trees.
    Imagine this : Enchanted forest being navigated
    by us 2 in 1 love -
    Like something straight outta Jason's Lyric.

    The trees filter sunlight on our journey.
    Leaves, pebblestones, gravely roads, strange noises and...
    ... the sense of a nearby stream
    Stepping cautiously ,
    cuz I've seen the Blair Witch and I'm not
    eeeven tryin to be Josh.

    but She's leading, she's guiding -
    as if she needs no map or compass.
    This step awakens a sleeping chipmunk.
    This step cracks a twig & the sky fills
    w/ birds on startled wings.
    This next step ................WHOA !!!!

    MUD SLIIIIIDE !!!!!!!

    ... at the bottom, she whispers " we're here " .

    Like something straight outta Jason's Lyric,
    her eyes dance around this valley w/
    flourishing lillies and tulips.
    Rolling green hills
    like a grass skirt gripping the earth's curves.
    Endless sky , a flowing stream nearby
    ... and the overwhelming question " WHY ? "

    Why did she choose me ?
    Am I worthy to share this place w/ her ?
    This place where every blade of grass bows in her direction
    This place dirt on her skin matches her skin.
    This place where fireflies spell out her glowing name.

    so delighted, but puzzle-fied , i lean head
    to one side and ask darling " Why ? "
    and she replied ...
    " The guy in class who stares at my butt
    but won't look me in the eye .
    The guy who sees my clothes falling on my frame
    as a reason I should be calling his name.
    The guy who thinks a split in my skirt
    is in invitation to my thigh ---
    I left THEM at the jagged rocks, access denied.

    But You , who have nothing to hide
    is granted permission to come inside... my space."

    My face, still slightly confused ..
    " but ... I must admit that I .... "

    " Yes I know " she interrupts
    " I know you want to be satisfied,
    my body decorated w/ everything you like
    is your natural high
    but you deserves this prize ,
    cuz you have never lied,
    and most of all -
    cuz you were caring enough to ask me why. "



    ___________________________________________________________-

    of course , I left out alot of factors out -
    but you get the drift -
    I would like a one night stand at times - i guess ,
    but this journey just gives a more scenic route
    to a person's innermost parts .
    ______________________________________________________________
     
  2. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    And so this...

    is just as tight as part 1...and I being
    the female that I am, I guess I too figured
    the answers from the sista here....so there
    is no need for me to ask "WHY"!!

    I'm lovin' erry thang about this...

    Black King, I see you as clearly as
    the Austrian Crystal you are!!

    1 :heart:
     
  3. Hypnotize

    Hypnotize Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    do black folks blush ??

    thank you very, very kindly
    for your words N2ursoul -
    I appreciate you identifying w/ this,
    it makes my day - honestly !!

    To all others,
    I must include that
    the name being spelled out
    by fireflies was taken from a popular
    movie from last year.... which one ?? ( 50 pts !! )
     
  4. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    HYPNOTIZE....

    what's really going on in that head of yours? :)

    i don't claim to be an authority on brilliance... but
    in my humble opinion... & since i know what i like...
    you are brilliant!... you do know that ryght?!?

    i loved this!!... loved it, loved it, lovedid it!

    don't stay away so long next tyme... have you done
    what i told you to do?? hmmm???

    Peace&Love...
    SunShyne~
     
  5. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yes...my reply to part one was appropriate...you have reached the outer limits...another nice scribe...my brother this writhng thing is in the blood ain't it?!

    one love,blak
     
  6. Jyntlbreez

    Jyntlbreez Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is really great work!

    I was diggin on both parts!
    Jyntl
     
  7. Reason

    Reason Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    **** Hyp!

    I gotta go check for the first part... this was off da chain dog! fa real!

    Madd Respect
    Reas
     
  8. GQ

    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Part 1 is a dime

    Part 2 is a dime

    I guess ya got a 20 here Hyp!!!!

    Brilliant dome thinkin'!!!!

    Peace
    GQ
     
  9. Hypnotize

    Hypnotize Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank ya'll

    I had to write this,
    cuz every guy I know still wants
    a girl like Jada played in Jason's Lyric -
    I don't know, Hunter just moved
    me to expound on my relations to/with
    the fair sex.

    Thank you all ,
    and Sunshyne - I'm the mushy type
    so if we all ever meet up
    expect a biiig hug from me !!!
    thanks for real , this means more than words.
     
  10. LISTERSCRIBIN'

    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    quite nyce, dear poet. wowww, now i gotta go re-read them both. keep on scribin'...i'm watchin'.
     
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