Black Poetry : " With or w/outHer space " pt. 1

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  1. Hypnotize

    Hypnotize Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ( this is long, get comfy )

    " With or w/outHer space - planetary alignment "



    It's a man's world, but all we think is you.
    needing you, mis-treating you
    beating you, cheating you
    breathing you, breathing you.

    You quiet heroine - heroic self - esteem oil sheen
    more than just some baby makin' machine
    w/ knobs and switches...
    Blowjob ******* ? - How suspicious is an act
    of my queen being the first to kneel to me ??
    In reality I live for secrets you reveal to me.
    Real is he ?
    Real is he.
    It's a man's world, and don't you know it's all for you .

    Tarnished Tiarra Crown,
    our black women CAN'T sit down.
    Too busy being busy in the field
    pickin twice her share of cotton cuz
    her husband is still bleedin' from last night's beatin'.
    Too busy being busy in the boardroom
    taking HER OWN orders cuz workers can't
    deal w/ C.E.O. brown & feminine.
    Too busy being busy raisin THAT *****'s kids.
    Yeah, You know THAT *****,
    but you never see THAT *****.
    our black women CAN'T sit down,
    SHAKIN' DAT ***.
    music videos, SHAKIN DAT ***
    steamy love affair, SHAKIN DAT ***
    taken care of YO ***, SHAKIN DAT *** !!!


    No, no - not yet sistah,
    don't give me your precious cries -
    just let me borrow a c.d. first.
    The Essence of Ebony is the Source of the Vibe
    in stores i tred to find condoms... ribbed for her pleasure
    but i was ... ribbed for her pleasure
    W/ good measure
    treasure buried in 4-page letters
    never read her, I left the letter in my leather
    cuz i ran out in bad weather to buy condoms...
    ... ribbed for her pleasure.
    A trojan disguised in wooden lies inside the temple,
    but wood burns between thighs & lies exposed.

    Proverbs final word is deserved but I wonder
    where your virtue REALLY is,
    the way you raise kids, handle biz,
    the way you teach virtue to cats
    who don't know what virtue is.
    **** , that auction block got us stock exchanging
    each other's flesh for a whispery cried " ..yyyes !! "
    dripped in sweat.

    The time your uncle/boyfriend/guy anonymous raped you.
    The time you marched in my place.
    The time I called you a *****.
    The over time and a half.
    The time i grabbed SHAKIN DAT ***,
    you smell different now.
    The time sleepin w/ Massuh saved our lives,
    gave our wifes, enslave our wives,
    deprave,crave and just play our wives
    take away our lives in a Man's world...
    ... where your apple ripe temptation
    can MAKE or BREAK creation.

    I don't understand you,
    but i've handed you so many hands you don't know
    which to take , so you STAY SHAKIN DAT ***
    in choir stands................................
    ......actin like your *** has a sinful mind of it's own.

    Time alone reveals we need time together.
    To find out if you're still scarredl.
    To free caged birds from behind steel bars.
    To sit down and get to the bottom of things.
    To stop exchanging jeans & screams for nice rings
    in our teens.

    Divine Instrument, the creation OF creation .
    Curve your curves around this ecstasy of His and Hers
    ONLY after your nerves have heard and accepted my words.
    Cuz this is a man's world,
    and I'll be damned if we ain't all lookin at you.

    In a weird way, all the joy,pain,hurt,hope -
    it all lies between us
    To Hell w/ ' mars & venus ' ,
    Beautiful Black Everything
    wearing planets as earrings
    decorating, adorning your every mourning - every morning.
    Eclipsing Nature's right of way.
    It's a man's world,
    and we all got our telescopes ... tryin to see you.


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    ever heard " Mountains " by Prince ???

    " there's nothing greater, than .... "
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  2. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    **** Baaaby~

    Now the haze is clearing and I can almost see
    you Black KING ~ just let me go on and read
    part 2...

    (just so you know - I'm followin' you,
    and this is soooo tight Hyp~)
     
  3. Hypnotize

    Hypnotize Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    LOL@ " just so you know... "

    Well N2urSoul,
    I must admit I'm following you as well -
    there's alot to see, and I'm lookin.


    For anyone else who reads this,
    I must include that
    " Proverbs final word " is
    about the last few verses in the book
    of proverbs and the woman it speaks of.
    No, I'm not a christian - but the Bible has some goods !

    and the " essence of ebony .... " line
    is a fave of mine and The Renaissance.
     
  4. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    HYPNOTIZE.....

    You have once again Blown My Mind!!...

    as i sit here... still Hypnotized by your words...
    i wonder if you know that this piece/peace speaks
    to me... on sooo many different levels!!
    (well, you know now, huh?? :) )

    PLEASE... PLEASE!! keepdoinwhatudo... DAYYYUM!!

    AlwaysLove...
    SunShyne~

    *on my way to part II*
     
  5. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hyp,

    brother...you have evolved into the outer realms of writing. this piece was nice..."10"

    one love,blak
     
  6. GQ

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    Hyp,

    This **** here is exactly why I acknowledged ya in my All-Star piece!!!!

    No doubt a 10 piece!!!!! One of ya best creations my man!!!!


    Respect
    GQ
     
  7. Hypnotize

    Hypnotize Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you friends -

    this is one long *** poem if you ask me - LOL !!
    but I thank you all for taking the time -

    " the outter realms of writing " ??
    dang big bro ! -
    takes one to know one -


    I'll be seeing you all on YOUR poetry soon. thanks.
     
  8. LISTERSCRIBIN'

    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    dayummm, hyp. this is so tyght. i see the message....
     
  9. Hypnotize

    Hypnotize Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you !!!!

    thank you , glad it was well recieved
     
  10. Afridancr

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    on my way to pt 2...

    your mental...Hypnotic!!
     
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